Talk:Verified Voting Foundation

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Alyssaamoreno. Peer reviewers: Dannyticknor, Li.andy.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 04:39, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

Danny's Peer Edit Review of Alyssa's First Draft Article
Hello Alyssa! I really like your article so far! This is a surprising amount of detail this far so soon and I'm jealous haha. I have a few suggestions though. You could begin to make it appear like a Wikipedia article with headings. So to do a heading on the Sandbox, you could look at what I put above. Enter the equals sign, the title you want to use, and another equals sign. If you want a subtitle or subcategory use two equals sign on each side of the title, and so on. A few other comments. The lead section and 2nd portion of the Background don't have any citations. I am also having this problem, but I believe each factual sentence should have 2 sources if you can! You have a great start, but I think it would be smart to mention why this foundation exists (why safeguarding is needed) Hope this helps and good luck! Dannyticknor (talk) 22:27, 23 March 2018 (UTC) Hi Danny! Thank you so much for looking over my article. I have already started to implement some of your suggestions. I am still trying to figure our all the different editing functions on Wikipedia so your comments about addicting sections are very helpful! As well, I have the citations but I am still working on adding them throughout the article so I'll be sure to do that soon. Alyssaamoreno (talk) 18:49, 31 March 2018 (UTC)

Alyssaamoreno Article Evaluation for Bustle Magazine
[My Notes] - The article doesn't provide a holistic perspective of the Bustle Magazine company. - This stub article has eight cited sources that all work but most of their information is not rephrased in the article. - The article strictly states facts about the start of the company without providing detail on the types of articles it provides and what audiences this is reaching. Personally, I think it is important to include this unbiased information since Bustle is a major source for news and politics for women. They are also one of the content building sites that's main focus os creating an abundance of content. - The comments on the Talk page for this article very clearly wanted this article to be taken down. The users to don't recognize Bustle as being important enough to deserve an entire Wikipedia article about them. - This article discusses this topic differently than we do in class because it does not explore the effects of having a tool like this. Like I have stated above, it only lists a few facts. Thus the article lacks context and information for its readers to leave with a clear understanding of the site's purpose. There needs to be more information about why a site like Bustle might exist in today's media and what audience it is reaching. This is especially since Bustle posts a mix of beauty, news, and political articles.

Alyssaamoreno (talk) 23:18, 9 February 2018 (UTC)
 * I think this belongs at Talk:Bustle (magazine) where a variant of the text can be found. ★NealMcB★ (talk) 23:14, 6 November 2019 (UTC)

Li.andy's peer Review
Hi Alyssaa,

Your background is very elaborate, however, it is very long. The majority of your article mentioned little about the actual topic itself, but I like that you included the background information to explain the need for a more secure voting platform was needed. It is best to provide a brief summary to explain the need for the platform.

Suggestions: -History section is very long. It should condensed. -Talk about the Verified Voting Foundation. (I’m still unsure about what it is and how it works.) -Cite your sources. -How was this platform made? In what coding language? -Who is the target audience? -Examples of times it has been utilized. -Reliability. Concerns about its security. Li.andy (talk) 19:35, 23 March 2018 (UTC)

Hello! Thank you so much for reviewing my article. I have already started to implement your suggestions. I definitely agree that initially the article had a great amount of history–but I have tried to start balancing that out! I have added some more explicit information about the Verified Voting Foundation and I am still in the process of researching more about it. I am also in the process of adding more hyper links to articles that already discuss some of the subtopics in my article to help with this issue. Alyssaamoreno (talk) 18:49, 31 March 2018 (UTC)

Liz's Peer Review of Alyssa's Article
Hi Alyssa, To start off I really enjoyed your article! You did a great job with tone, style, and clarity, clearly accomplishing a Wikipedian unbiased tone. It's very well written! I think for some suggestions, first off would be to add a Contents section after your lead to outline your page. I think the lead is very good in accomplishing establishing the importance of the topic and including the important information of the topic. However, I think your lead is so good that you should include some of your information as a subsection itself about the company. I think your lead can be cut down into a few sentences, and that you can move the specific information below into more subsections of what Verified Votings' history is. I like how you included the background of the voting, but I think you should put that instead as a few sentences in the lead to suggest why the topic and company is important, rather than as multiple subsections of the actual article, or as a smaller history subsection paragraph. I also think for the history, you should link other Wikipedia pages to the specific things you mention (like in the Ballet History section), and add more sources since this part had a lot of good facts and information in it. Finally, I think you should add more specifics of what the foundation actually does, what it has done, and what it intends to do, as well as the foundation in the media below, building off what you already put in the lead. I hope this was helpful, and sorry for the late response I have been out of the country the past 14 days!-Liz — Preceding unsigned comment added by 96.95.203.233 (talk) 22:08, 3 April 2018 (UTC)