Talk:Veturia

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Your article does a good job of telling a story. Check for some grammatical errors (e.g. descended, reacived). Also, it would be helpful to have more links to other Wikipedia pages for unfamiliar or important terms (e.g. matron, Volscians). Try to add a time period for when this event occurred to give the reader a reference point in the span of Roman history. While I understand there may not be much information about Veturia, see if she is mentioned in any other contexts besides this encounter with the Volscians. This near attack of Rome is already recounted in the article about Coriolanus. Perhaps you can expand on how she became a “model of Roman feminine virtue.” Is she referenced in any celebrations of feminine virtue? Connor Kobeski 165.124.113.65 03:55, 15 May 2007 (UTC)

Your addition to the article helps to tell about Veturia's involvement in her son's life, but is there any other aspect of her life that you may be missing? Is this the only event that she was known for? Most of the information concerning this story seems to also be present in the entry on Coriolanus. How did Veturia's display of virtue affect women's actions in later Roman history? See if Plutarch has any references to her, since I think he wrote an account of the story. Just by searching for Veturia's name on the web, I found a quote from her to her son. If you can find a reliable source for this quote, that would be something useful to add to the article. Like Connor said, there are several spelling errors (territory and convinced are spelled incorrectly as well), but just copying the text into Word and using spellcheck should get rid of most errors. In addition, you only listed two references, whereas we needed at least three for the assignment. Alex Russell 21:11, 15 May 2007 (UTC)

Grammatical errors and run-on sentences make this hard to read, although your overall research is sound (if limited.)