Talk:Vibrio anguillarum

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Ryan.lou, Tony mo, Maddyy.h, Jackiebuchanan. Peer reviewers: Ktam01, Lemakrug, Hcf04, Gabeval..

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 04:40, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

EOSC 475 Peer Review
I like the overall structure of your page with a wide coverage of related materials for the topic. Here are some comments that I hope are helpful to you:

-I find the heading "Canadian History" a bit confusing... Is it the first recognition of this bacteria in Canada or the first discovery is in Canada?

-There is different number of serotypes being stated in "Taxonomy" (24) vs "Canadian History" (23)

-In "Ecology" there is a typo in the last word

-In "Pathogen and Virulence", maybe elaborate a bit more on how LPS will assist infection after entry (invasion)?

-In "Clinical signs and diagnosis", is there a reason for the enlargement of spleen in particular?

-In "Societal Impacts", is there data available worldwide such that it is not focusing on Canada only?

-Maybe talk a bit about the ecological significance of this bacteria?

-Overall: some of the species names are not italicized, and I suggest keeping the format of capitalization of the sections the same. Can also add more links to other wikipedia page and pictures.

Anyways I think it is a good start and I enjoy reading it! Ktam01 (talk) 08:07, 14 March 2018 (UTC)

Just a couple of notes to add:

-Some of the microbiology terminology could use defining or links to explanatory articles. For example, serotype, antisera, western blot, LPS profiles, virulence factor, siderophores, periplasmic transporter lipoprotein.

-As was previously stated, the “Canadian History” section confusing, and feels a little out of place. Perhaps a little more clarity on the purpose of this section. Perhaps a slightly more descriptive sub-heading?

-As for the “Ecology” section. Would it be possible to add to this? Perhaps how it might affect fish populations, or how it has affected things like aquaculture in the past? Is it likely to be a problem in the future?

-The second paragraph in the “Metabolism” subheading is missing a period at the end of the first sentence “high intracellular ion concentration”

-Some of the formatting in terms of linking, emphasis and asides changes from section to section. Perhaps consider trying to make this uniform throughout the article?

-The technical language might be a bit advanced for the average Wiki user.

Overall, this is a really good article! It is well written and thorough. Well done! Hcf04 (talk) 07:44, 16 March 2018 (UTC)Hcf04

EOSC 475 Peer Review
In the General section: I would like to see a picture of the bacteria. Also more pictures in general would be nice!

In the Taxonomy section: - What does LPS stand for? - Sentence 2 lacks citation. - Provide a link to a serotype wikipedia page.

In the Ecology section: - Reword the last sentence to "An environment that contains divalent cations allows Vibrio anguillarum to thrive."

In the Metabolism section: - The end of sentence three "released into the cytoplasm or modification once iron is collected" needs to be reworded. - Missing punctuation in 2nd paragraph, first sentence. - Paragraphs 2-4 there are sentences where citations are lacking. - Link to a siderophore wikipedia article. - I am a bit confused as to why this section is titled metabolism when it is mostly talking about iron acquisition and siderophore production? Consider changing the title to iron acquisition?

In the Pathogen and Virulence section: - Perhaps reword this section title? - Some sentences are lacking citations.

In the Clinical signs and diagnosis section: - Is there an image you can provide of the symptoms?

A general note is to check over your paper for grammatical errors and facts that you have not cited. Also I think you can provide more links to other wikipedia pages throughout the article. In all, this is really well written and you have been careful in maintaining a neutral tone throughout. Nevertheless, I would suggest reading through the article and making sure the tone of it resembles what you would see in an encyclopedia. I liked the way you broke down your different sections. Although, I agree with the peer review above that the Canadian history section seems out of place. Perhaps if that section was just titled History and placed first in your layout it would make more sense? I liked that you included a section on societal impact! Maybe change the heading to "Societal Implications" to make it sound better? I think everything that you included in your article was relevant and important to the topic. Your citation links work and you have provided good sources. Great job!

Lemakrug (talk) 21:04, 18 March 2018 (UTC)

Develop Ecology More

— Preceding unsigned comment added by Maddyy.h (talk • contribs) 20:30, 23 March 2018 (UTC) DferDaisy (talk) 15:04, 24 March 2018 (UTC)

To everyone (Ktam01, Lemakrug, Hcf04) who contributed to the talk page through peer review, thank you so much for all of your wonderful feedback.

Best wishes! From Maddy.

— Preceding unsigned comment added by Maddyy.h (talk • contribs) 02:51, 27 March 2018 (UTC)

Plagiarism accusation
An IP, User:128.119.84.54, is removing large sections of the article, accusing plagiarism. I am pinging User:Curt99, who was (is?) an instructor in the course that flushed out the article for additional comments. I do not have access to the full reference quoted so I cannot confirm the accusation. Ifnord (talk) 17:03, 20 June 2019 (UTC)

User 2601:8B:4401:5AC0:E807:5982:DB9E:1678 has made similar assertion in May 2021 which I have moved here from the article itself. No details on what is plagiarized however -- which text and how much. Anyone have a copy of the paper linked at ? LizardJr8 (talk) 22:11, 1 June 2021 (UTC)

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