Talk:Vic Fontaine/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 22:24, 19 December 2015 (UTC)

I'll finish this one soon JAG  UAR   22:24, 19 December 2015 (UTC)

Initial comments

 * Quark is linked twice in the lead
 * "Darren hadn't wanted to attend" - had not
 * "but his friend talked him out of it as he felt that Darren would think he was crazy" - I'm worried 'crazy' sounds informal as it's not being used in a direct quote
 * "but doesn't act correctly" - does not
 * Either British or American English should be used throughout. I noticed "favor" in the lead and "realised" in the body

Close - promoted
I couldn't find anything worthy enough to put this on hold, and I believe that this meets the GA criteria outright. It is well written and comprehensive. I did find a couple of minor prose issues, but they could easily be fixed. I wasn't sure about using Memory Alpha as a reliable source, but since it's an extract of Moore's AOL chat it should be fine. I enjoyed "Badda-Bing Badda-Bang", I thought it was better than most of the Voyager holodeck episodes! JAG UAR   15:37, 21 December 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review - I agree, I wouldn't normally use Memory Alpha as a source (I've found too many times from double checking "sourced" statements on there that the sources don't state that, or they've got something incorrect in the sourcing). I've made the edits from your points about. Miyagawa (talk) 18:21, 21 December 2015 (UTC)