Talk:Vicky Knight/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:33, 23 November 2019 (UTC)

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 13:33, 23 November 2019 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "She has starred in Too Ugly For Love (2014), and Dirty God (2019)." - the comma is unneeded in this instance
 * "Knight received burns to 33% of her body - don't use the % symbol per MOS:PERCENT
 * "from the 2003 fire" - a 2003 fire
 * "'she doesn't get acting roles in films." - better and avois the use of unnccessary contractions outside of quotations per MOS:CONTRACTION: receive no acting roles in films.
 * "Knight participated 'in the sponsored 28-mile walk," - a sponsored 28 mi
 * "After raising £1,000," - Afterwards,
 * ✅  CAPTAIN MEDUSA   talk  00:44, 24 November 2019 (UTC)

2003 fire

 * "which had been owned by her grandfather, but was then being run by her uncle," - and was run by her uncle,
 * "Kevin Knight and his wife Kate.[5][3][6] - the arranging of the sources here should be in numerical order
 * "Later he died from the injuries" - more gramatically correct; Springer later died
 * "who entered the fire to save them.[9][6]" - same issue as the second issue I've mentioned in this section
 * "Vicky Knight received burns to 33%" - the % symbol should be changed to per cent per MOS:PERCENT
 * "She tried to hide her scars" - how about using the word conceal rather than hide?
 * How about give a specific mention that Knight was bullied verbally and physically as stated in The Guardian source?
 * ✅  CAPTAIN MEDUSA   talk  00:52, 24 November 2019 (UTC)

Career

 * "She later stated that she was duped" - use a more formal word in place of "duped" such as deceive
 * "Jay Weissberg of the Variety wrote" - try to change the opening part of this sentence so it is different than the similarly worded one before it
 * "Knight has said that Dirty God has completely changed her life. She further added that it was "helping her come to terms with her scars." - reword the sentence to Knight stated Dirty God changed her entriely life in helping her cope with her burn scars. to limit a violation of WP:LIMITED
 * "The same year she was nominated for Breakthrough Brits by British Academy Film Awards (BAFTA)" - the text in bold should be changed to for the Breakthrough Brits Award by the British Academy Film Awards (BAFTA).
 * ✅  CAPTAIN MEDUSA   talk  00:57, 24 November 2019 (UTC)

Personal life

 * "known as Vicky Chaundy.[2][9][3]" - the arranging of the sources here should be in numerical order
 * "Knight finds hard to access her emotions about her scars, she further added" - better and concise Knight added she finds it difficult to enter the emotions concering her scars
 * "She also revealed that she was feeling suicidal, she said" - this is an improvement and concise She also revealed she has had sucidial ideation
 * "She has participated in a sponsored 28-mile walk" - use the convert template on 28-mile
 * "work as healthcare assistant" - should be worded as work as a healthcare assistant
 * if she doesn't get any more acting roles in films." - the text in bold should be worded to in the event she recevies no more roles in films to avoid using unncessary contractions outside of quotations per MOS:CONTRACTION
 * "She has also said she would like to write a book about her life." - There is close paraphrasing in this sentence and does not pass WP:LIMITED. Please reword the sentence to limit the close paraphrasing here.
 * ✅  CAPTAIN MEDUSA   talk  01:09, 24 November 2019 (UTC)