Talk:Vikram Vedha/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Numerounovedant (talk · contribs) 17:00, 7 July 2018 (UTC)


 * "Sam C. S. wrote the soundtrack and score" - wrote?
 * "received positive critical feedback, with praise for Pushkar and Gayathri's direction and script, Vinod's cinematography, and the performances of the two male leads." - why not say "positive feedback, with critics praising all major aspects of the production"?
 * "The film's success resurrected the Tamil film industry" - "resurrected" is a little heavy handed. Why not say that the film performed well despite the GST?

Will look at rest soon,.  Vedant  Talk  17:10, 7 July 2018 (UTC)
 * I have resolved your initial comments, . —  Ssven2  Looking at you, kid 18:17, 7 July 2018 (UTC)

More:
 * "They planned to make their next film one with a more serious tone" - grammar.
 * Is "shades of grey" a direct quote?
 * "considered setting the film in politics, business and journalism" - setting the film in isn't really right.
 * Do you have a better alternative, ?


 * "completing it by April 2016" - in?
 * "In addition to growing a beard for his role, Madhavan did not workout to lose weight." - what he did should come before how he did it. So, maybe just say he lost weight in this sentence and then talk about how he did it later.
 * The filming sections might be a little monotonous with similarly structure sentences.
 * There's nothing much to get from the filming section except the schedules (when they commenced etc). Not much detailed information regarding its filming and shooting came around (which seems strange considering it has two bankable stars). The rest have been hopefully resolved.

Looking through the rest.  Vedant  Talk  04:35, 11 July 2018 (UTC)
 * Your comments thus far have been hopefully resolved. Let me know if there’s anything I might have missed. —  Ssven2  Looking at you, kid 16:06, 11 July 2018 (UTC)

Continued: I'll read through reception soon.  Vedant  Talk  14:25, 13 July 2018 (UTC)
 * "For his work in Vikram Vedha, Sam composed the score based on the script" - "For his work in VV" is really not required.
 * You might also to rephrase the latter half of the sentence; "rather than doing so" is too wordy.
 * The third paragraph of the music section is very disjointed. You might want to improve the flow there.
 * "Before to the release of the album" - Prior to or Before.
 * You can also add the date of release in the same sentence to avoid repetition.
 * Your comments thus far have been hopefully resolved. Let me know if there’s anything I might have missed. —  Ssven2  Looking at you, kid 16:32, 13 July 2018 (UTC)


 * "The film was initially planned for release" - why not say "was scheduled to release on..." and then merge the second sentence into the first.
 * "however, due to" that's just not right.
 * "Vikram Vedha, along with Hiphop Tamizha's Meesaya Murukku, were" - was.
 * "with praise for its direction, story, screenplay, cinematography, and the performances of Madhavan and Sethupathi" - I might have said this before, but if most aspects were praised then there is no point in listing them.
 * "by far the best film to release in Tamil this year so far" - can be easily paraphrased.
 * "He observed that while both Madhavan and Sethupathi" - while isn't required.

Before we go any further, why don't consider restructuring the section theme wise, the general praise, the performances the criticism and so on? Let me know how you feel.  Vedant  Talk  15:46, 15 July 2018 (UTC)
 * I've resolved your comments hopefully, . Can you look at the critical response section again? I've restructured it. Let me know your opinion of it. Thanks. —  Ssven2  Looking at you, kid 16:21, 15 July 2018 (UTC)

It looks better organised now, but still needs work. Here are a few comments: Let me know if you have any questions about the comments. I apologise for the delayed responses.  Vedant  Talk  05:59, 18 July 2018 (UTC)
 * The section should not be structured with the critic at the center, but the comments. Ideally, all comments about the story should be in one paragraph, direction in one and so on. It'll be fine for now, but it's always better if you keep that in mind while writing reception section.
 * You can't really characterise the "lead cast".
 * "three and a half out of five stars", that's the problem with ratings, that you mention here the "out of" bit, but do not do it elsewhere makes it ambiguous for the reader. And if you mention the "out of" field everywhere it's just too wordy and monotonous. I'd do away with ratings altogether. Let the statement speak for the critic.
 * "says that Sethupathi "oozes of charisma" and Madhavan gives "a whole-hearted" effort" - Why the present tense suddenly?
 * "Subramaniam further added that Srinath and Varalakshmi portrayed "brave characters", and Kathir, Prem and Peradi "do their part well"." - I do not see the value of the "brave characters" as it doesn't say anything about the performances and the "do their part well" isn't particularly quote worthy either.
 * "in his sleep" - that's an unusual thing to put in quotes.
 * "crowd-pleasing lines in the most casual fashion" - I don't​ know if that's a good or a bad thing.
 * "Suganth appreciated its "well-crafted"" - The film's and no quotes needed.
 * "well crafted filmmaking"?
 * "praising the climax sequence in particular, noting that all the conversations between the characters, and even the opening sequence" - the opening sequence needs to go first.
 * This paragraph jumps from one thing to another without any real flow still, fancy another try at this?
 * The last paragraph needs to rewritten. Too many issues there: the opening line has grammar issue, the tense is messed up, "while" and "and" etc.
 * I've hopefully now restructured the critical response section, . Let me know your opinion of it. Thanks. —  Ssven2  Looking at you, kid 08:27, 19 July 2018 (UTC)

Looks better now.  Vedant  Talk  15:11, 19 July 2018 (UTC)

Looks good to me now, just a couple of issues with the refs. Once the comments on the references are addressed, I'll give it a final reading.  Vedant  Talk  15:11, 19 July 2018 (UTC)
 * Final comments
 * Scroll.in should be italicised.
 * Link Sify.
 * Why mention the agency specifically for ref 16?
 * What are Behindwoods, Silverscreen.in?
 * I do not think of IndiaGlitz as reliable.

This should do it then. I'll pass this article, good work. Sorry that this dragged.  Vedant  Talk  06:40, 21 July 2018 (UTC)
 * Final comments