Talk:Vimy Ridge Day

Some improvements
Vimy Ridge Day Critique This article gave a very detailed description of the stages of the battle. It was informative and accurate in giving the reader a detailed time line on the stages of the battle and some of the major events that took place that day. The Portals placed during the article also led to other very informative articles on Vimy Ridge as well. Over all this is a well written article, however to improve this article it may help to add some more specific information. As far as improvements, a prelude involving the importance of Vimy Ridge may help to inform readers of why the battle took place and the forces at power leading up to the battle. From there a detailed description of the ridge may have been effective to give the reader a good mental grasp on what the soldiers where dealing with and how the ridge was necessary to protects advancing friendly troops from enemy powers. The article also should mention the tactical and strategic planning that went into planning the battle as well as whom led the canadian forces into the battle of Vimy Ridge (Julian Bying). Furthermore, another vital point this article missed was informing the reader in a more detailed way of the German defenses that the Canadian troops were up against and the types of weapons that the Germans held on the ridge.

The article also did not inform the readers that Vimy Ridge previously had a number of failed attempts to be overrun by both the Americans and the british whom developed underground operation tunnels that where used by the Canadians on the first day of battle to help cease control of the main hill on Vimy Ridge. It also had no mention of the preliminary attack from Canadian artillery that was vital for Canadian troops to attempt to break the strong German lines.

Finally the article would really benefit the reader more if a more detailed section on the after math of vimy ridge and the outcomes of the battle where provided. It did mention how many were killed, however, it left out that the Germans did not see the battle as a loss, they perceived it as a draw and made no further attempts to attack the canadians during their occupation of the ridge. Furthermore, adding small section of the influences the battle had on canada may have been of good use to anyone researching the battle. Influences such as Canada becoming a part of a National unity and how from this battle Canadian Corps became a more respected Identity in the the war of Arras.

However, these are simply just suggestions on how the article could be strengthened, any reader wandering about just the main battle will not be disappointed. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Atisdale121 (talk • contribs) 21:53, 27 September 2012 (UTC)
 * Do keep in mind that this article concerns the day not the battle. Some of the points listed are not correct (ex: the Americans and British never attacked the ridge, just the French) so they can't really be addressed. Including information on influences may be valid for this page as this is why the day was created.--Labattblueboy (talk) 19:48, 19 February 2013 (UTC)