Talk:Vince Dunn/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 16:58, 27 May 2020 (UTC)

Will be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 16:58, 27 May 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * Delink Canadian per MOS:OVERLINK
 * Wikilink Peterborough Petes on the first mention in the lead
 * Link scouts to Scout (sport) for those unfamiliar with the term

Youth

 * Wikilink Peterborough Petes and minor hockey to the correct entries on their first mention in the prose
 * "to allow him to be eligible to play with the Petes." - I think the words in bold are unneeded
 * Wikilink Barrie to the relevant article
 * Wikilink points to the appropriate article

Major junior

 * "Dunn led all first year defencemen in the league in scoring with 33 points in 63 games." - Hockeys Future does not mention Dunn scored 33 points. Please find another to go along with Hockeys Future to verify that the information is correct
 * "totaling 56 points in 68 games" - not mentioned by the Niagara IceDogs source attached to it. Please use another source that explicitly states this fact
 * "where he remained pointless in the 6-0 loss to Team Orr." - please use an en dash in place of the hyphen
 * "He also earned a final ranking of 32 overall" - 32nd
 * "to help the team win the series 4-2." - en dash please

Professional

 * "Approaching his second season as a pro," - professional
 * "He consistently played on the teams" - team's
 * "by once again cracking the Blues lineup to begin the 2018–19 season." - use another formal word instead of cracking
 * Wikilink cross-checked for those unfamiliar with ice hockey terminology
 * "Dunn recorded a new career high in 'points" - how many points?
 * Wikilink Alex Pietrangelo and Colton Parayko
 * "St. Louis' first Stanley Cup in their 52-year franchise history." - mykawartha.com doesn't mention it was St. Louis' first Stanley Cup win in its 52-year history but Peterborough Examiner. I suggest citation bundling
 * "During the pause in play due to COVID-19," - due to the COVID-19 pandemic,
 * "Dunn competed in a league wide" - league-wide
 * Wikilink Fortnite