Talk:Vincent Valentine/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: DragonZero (talk · contribs) 03:06, 5 May 2013 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Comments below. Issues must be resolved to pass GA. Suggestions can be ignored if you wish.
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Comments below. Issues must be resolved to pass GA. Suggestions can be ignored if you wish.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Comments below. Issues must be resolved to pass GA. Suggestions can be ignored if you wish.

Issues

 * File:Vincent Valentine art.jpg needs a better rationale
 * "As a result, Vincent and Yuffie ultimately appeared as optional characters in the game." Is this backed up by a source? It would be original research otherwise.
 * "He has often been labeled a "vampire" due to his physical appearance and mannerisms, such as the fact that he "slept" in a coffin." Remove, its an opinionated name.
 * "These adjustments continued until six months before the completion of the project." reword for clarity.
 * "Vincent was chosen as the protagonist of Dirge of Cerberus due to his strong connections to the setting of Final Fantasy VII and the room available for expanding on his background." Source? If you're sourcing a whole paragraph with the same source, use it in the first sentence then in the last.
 * "For the game, Nomura redesigned Vincent's gun in the same way that Cloud's Buster Sword was redesigned for Advent Children, so as to demonstrate that Vincent is the protagonist of the game." Same as above

Suggestions

 * File:Dirgeofcerberusgun.jpg is unnecessarily large. Reduce the size.
 * Not sure if WP:TENSE would apply so I'm leaving this as a suggestion. Write the Final Fantasy VII appearance as if it followed the character to reduce confusion; basically there won't be a big reveal about his past so there are no "flash backs" in the flow of the wording.


 * Thanks for the review! I reduced one image, and rewrote the rationale for the other. I also rephrased what was suggested, and cut opinion out of the creation section. I also hunted for the origin of that information and found those statements with references in other articles and place, and put them there so it's clear where they came from. On the issue of appearances, I think normally we write the appearances in an out of universe perspective, so chronologically it is harder to follow, but it might be more encyclopedic. Let me know what you think about that, but all the issues have been resolved! Judgesurreal777 (talk) 05:16, 5 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Passing. If I ever review one of your articles again, please reply under the points so I know which one you addressed. DragonZero  ( Talk  ·  Contribs ) 05:32, 5 May 2013 (UTC)