Talk:Violent Crimes (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: BeatlesLedTV (talk · contribs) 01:25, 1 April 2019 (UTC)

I'll get to this sometime this week. – BeatlesLedTV (talk) 01:25, 1 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Good to hear I'll stop asking you and simply wait. Kyle Peake (talk) 01:57, 1 April 2019 (UTC)--

Responding to some points now --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:46, 2 April 2019 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

 * Infobox looks good
 * Most of the lead is out of order
 * Ordered how you said, I think...?
 * Looks good now


 * "It serves as the album's closer." – don't like this sentence
 * Changed
 * "Vocals from Ty Dolla Sign, 070 Shake and Nicki Minaj are included within the song." – reads weird; "The song contains vocals from rappers Ty Dolla Sign, 070 Snake, and Nicki Minaj."
 * Done
 * On top of this, Minaj doesn't actually have any vocals, it's a spoken word message that sounds like a voicemail or phone call then West recorded and put on it.
 * How does my referencing of her in the lead look now?
 * Looks good now


 * To make the lead longer, maybe mention "The song was written by (list all the writers), then "but Thorpe, also known as Pardison Fontaine, contributed to most of its writing."
 * Done
 * Writing should be like the third or fourth sentence and before the lyric video
 * Done
 * The critical reception to be the first sentence of the second paragraph.
 * Done

Background

 * Not sure how everything from 'Along' to 'better' (end quote) fits in with background.
 * It works, giving a background on West and Ty Dolla Sign as well as 070 Shake, since she was made a lot more famous by the song, being barely even known before.
 * Ah I got you.


 * "Tyler, The Creator revealed when speaking to GQ in August 2018 that the song's chords made him cry.[8]" – 'the' in his name should be lowercase; this should be in reception or a legacy section
 * Edited and moved to reception.

Composition

 * ""Violent Crimes" has a soft R&B background and is the closer to Ye.[9]" – the fact that it's the closer shouldn't be mentioned here; change to "Violent Crimes" is a hip hop song with elements of contemporary R&B" (or just R&B)
 * Done
 * Where does Ty Dolla Sign's vocals appear?
 * Will search up this and try to fix it
 * Does the edit I added now read fine?
 * "Run alongside" doesn't sound right when talking about vocals
 * Changed, how's it look now? --Kyle Peake (talk) 18:27, 3 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Good now


 * Does Minaj semi-speak or semi-rap?
 * Changed to "semi-speaks"
 * "at the end of it" – "at the end of the song"
 * Done
 * Last sentence is a strong run-on and can be separated at 'since'
 * Done, but is it fine now or still need improvements from the two sentences?
 * The term "shade" being used here doesn't sound that encyclopedic. I know the term is used in the reference but it just sounds weird here. Is it also confirmed that that's what West was doing, or is it just one person's opinion? Because until I read that, I never once linked the two together. While I'm not sure whether or not West and Swift are on good terms at this point (3 years later), I am interested to know if that's what was West's intention with making the voice message a part of the song.
 * I have reworded "shade" and made sure to keep it clear that rumours had it for West to be shading Swift (the ref shows multiple tweets from users that speculated so.) Does this sentence look fine now and if not, what should I do?
 * My main problem with the last sentence is that it reads as though the whole "Famous" drama happened very recently when it happened 3 years ago. Maybe word it as though it was a callback and not a direct response to it.
 * Referenced 2016 in the sentence and wrote "at the time", fine now? Kyle Peake (talk) 06:05, 4 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Much better now


 * "Nicki Minaj's vocals" – if you're gonna say "prior to Nicki Minaj's outro" right before this just use her last name cuz it's odd reading full names back-to-back.
 * Done

Writing

 * Not sure if this deserves its own section
 * With the significant coverage of the writing, a section is noteworthy. I don't see how not?
 * I think it can be combined into composition and renamed "Composition and writing"
 * The composition section is already large enough as it is and the writing section is of a reasonable size in its own right, so can't they stay apart logically?
 * There's really no limit as to how big a section has to be, as long as all the info is relevant to the heading. Writing and composition are somewhat the same since one leads to the other so they ultimately blend together. Combining them would make more sense; have comp be one paragraph and writing be another.
 * Done

Release and promotion

 * Change to release and promotion and do what we did on "Father Stretch My Hands" ("Violent Crimes" was released on June 1, 2018, as the final track on West's eighth studio album Ye.)
 * Should I do this and use Tidal as a source or AllMusic like you did on the other song?
 * Use AllMusic
 * I have done this now, could you respond to the comments made by me and also, do you have any further improvements to be made for the article?
 * Couple more above. – BeatlesLedTV (talk) 18:14, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * "It was written by Christopher Hooton of The Independent that" → Christopher Hooton of The Independent wrote that"
 * Done

Commercial performance

 * Good

Personnel

 * Use en dashes not colons
 * Done

Charts

 * Good

Certifications

 * Good

Final thoughts

 * So far looks alright but could be better. I'll have more to say once everything here is taken care of. – BeatlesLedTV (talk) 18:03, 2 April 2019 (UTC)
 * Alright everything looks good now. i'll go ahead and ✅ this. – BeatlesLedTV (talk) 21:18, 4 April 2019 (UTC)