Talk:Virgin America/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MrWooHoo (talk · contribs) 14:23, 16 January 2017 (UTC)

Hi, I'm MrWooHoo. I'd like to quickly explain how I'll be reviewing this article. I will do a general review (checking the criteria), then doing an in-depth prose and source review. Thanks! Mr WooHoo ( T  •  C ) 14:25, 16 January 2017 (UTC)
 * Excellent; I look forward to hearing your thoughts and complying with any requested improvements! D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 20:48, 16 January 2017 (UTC)

Prose Review
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One main issue with the lede I'm a bit confused about...it's using past tense. However, Virgin America and Alaska have not fully merged yet and in the infobox there is no information showing that Virgin America is no longer an airline, so shouldn't you be still using present tense?

Examples: Why use had begun when you should use began?
 * "and had begun operations in 2007."
 * ✅ Got it. D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 22:11, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

Note here that the first two sentences uses past (was), but the third sentence uses present tense (provides).
 * Virgin America was a brand created by the British Virgin Group as an American counterpart to the corporation's other airlines.[4] The airline was founded to provide low-fare, high-quality service for service between major metropolitan cities on the Eastern and West Coast seaboards.[5] Virgin America's frequent flyer program Elevate provides award flights and other benefits to frequent fliers."
 * ✅ I've taken the liberty of fixing this up, but I'd like to receive your approval. D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 22:11, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

In some areas of the article you are using a comma after an introductory statement, but here you aren't. Stick to conformity throughout the article.
 * "On 8 August 2008 the airline made its inaugural New York and Los Angeles to San Francisco flights "
 * ✅ Good point; I've added that comma throughout, as that's the style I prefer. D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 22:11, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

Also, make sure you're using dmy or mdy format throughout the article.
 * "On May 21, 2009, Virgin America became the first U.S. airline to offer Wi-Fi access via Gogo Inflight Internet on every flight. "
 * ✅ I dig the MDY format, so I believe I've now had that set in uniformity. D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 22:11, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

Are all these details necessary about Oprah chatting with a specific flight attendant using a specific voice chatting service?
 * "To promote the service, Oprah Winfrey chatted with a flight attendant, Mandalay Roberts, aboard Flight 780 between Seattle and Los Angeles using Skype."
 * ✅ I honestly believe none of those details are integral. D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 22:11, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

Shouldn't it be "it" instead of "for"?
 * "In March 2010, Virgin America announced its intention to start flying to Toronto from Los Angeles and San Francisco, making for the airline's first international destination."
 * ✅ Quite right; done! D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 22:11, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

Change Department of Transportation to Department of Transportation's.
 * "Following the Department of Transportation approval of Virgin America's proposal"
 * ✅ Got it. D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 22:11, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

Remove the comma and add the word "and" between "lighting" and "all".
 * "Both cabins feature mood lighting, all seats are equipped with Panasonic Avionics' personal in-flight entertainment system running a customized touch-screen GUI called Red."
 * ✅ Done. D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 22:11, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

In one sentence you are adding the serial comma (the comma before the and as bolded in the quote), but in the other you aren't. Make sure there's conformity with having the comma or not throughout the article.
 * "Passengers seated in first class receive complimentary meals, refreshments, and alcoholic beverages and receive dedicated airport check-in, security screening, and aircraft boarding. In first class, Red offers free live satellite television, free on-demand movies, free on-demand television programming and a selection of games. "
 * ✅ I don't really dig serial commas, so I've given conformity and also gone through the article, removing any other Oxford punctuation. D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 22:11, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

Once again, either use the comma before and, or don't. Make that decision throughout the article.
 * "In Main Cabin, Red offers free live satellite television, pay-per-view on-demand movies and on-demand television shows, a small selection of free games and a larger selection of games for purchase."
 * ✅ Agreed. D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 22:11, 30 January 2017 (UTC)

Source Review

 * Reference 48 cites "Planespotters.net". Does this satisfy WP:RS?
 * I can't find any alternative sources that update the fleet, as stated below. I'd like to hear your feedback. D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 23:37, 31 January 2017 (UTC)


 * Reference 51 is dead, although it's not required for GA, I would fix it on the path to FA.
 * ✅ D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 23:37, 31 January 2017 (UTC)
 * I will be on the road until the end of the weekend, but I will make the necessary adjustments as soon as I am home. Just a matter of hours. D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 21:16, 29 January 2017 (UTC)
 * I've applied most every recommendation thus far, though I don't know what to do about the fleet reference, as I can't find a first-party or even more prominent third-party source. For replacing the dead source, I utilized the Fly With Us page on their website, which includes all the same information from the press release, albeit in a less press-oriented fashion. D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 22:27, 30 January 2017 (UTC)
 * After a final check of the article, everything looks up to the GA standard. Will pass now! Mr WooHoo  ( T  •  C ) 02:49, 1 February 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much! I am very pleased to see this. :) D ARTH B OTTO talk•cont 05:12, 1 February 2017 (UTC)