Talk:Virginia Mae Brown/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:04, 29 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * "became an assistant to Attorney General John G. Fox, becoming " became, becoming repetitive.


 * "Attorney General John G. Fox," link(s)?


 * "insurance commissioner" what's one of those?


 * "(married April 8, 1955)[2]" this could be mentioned in the prose, not just the infobox, and thus referenced there too.


 * Likewise, her parents could be mentioned in the prose as well.


 * No need for "(November 13, 1923 – February 15, 1991)" in Early life section, just say when she was born at that point, as part of the running prose.


 * "Bachelor of Arts" could link.


 * "became an assistant to Attorney General John G. Fox," links?


 * "West Virginia's governor" link?


 * "Insurance Commissioner" this wasn't capitalised in the lead, which is correct?
 * ✅ = lower case


 * "becoming the first female insurance commissioner" repetitive. And what is one of those?
 * ✅ = public official


 * Could link UN.


 * "ended in divorce.[when?][4]" this has been tagged.
 * ✅ = researched this and no sources say a date. They just say that the marriage ended in a divorce.


 * "700-acre" convert.


 * "Brown was a member of the Presbyterian Christian faith.[2]" that could easily slip into the Personal life section.


 * "James V. Brown" Vernon.


 * "1944–52" etc, year ranges need to include full years per MOS, unless consecutive or limited space, neither of which applies here.


 * "1935-current" en-dash.


 * "AncestoryLibrary.com" websites are normally italicised.

✅ = tried "work" - but it red-lined giving me More than one of |work= and |website= specified. so set back to "publisher" = no red line!
 * "Clarksburg Sunday Exponent-Telegram" that's a work.

✅
 * "LA Times.com. L.A. Times. " don't think you need both, I'd just stick with Los Angeles Times.

✅
 * Second biblio, looks like it should have "Yearbook" included in the title.

That's all I have on the first reading. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 17:18, 29 August 2021 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the first reading. I'll start working on the issues.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 17:22, 29 August 2021 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:27, 29 August 2021 (UTC)