Talk:WDCA/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 00:34, 1 May 2023 (UTC)


 * Will get to this within seven days.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 00:34, 1 May 2023 (UTC)
 * There we are! On hold.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 03:13, 1 May 2023 (UTC)
 * Nice work! Pass.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 15:20, 1 May 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio
Earwig says good to go.

Files
Good to go. File 1 is indeed public domain and files 2–5 each have valid non-free use rationales.

Prose

 * Wikilink UHF or perhaps spell it "ultra high frequency (UHF)".
 * Did Rogers elaborate on why it would not be viable?
 * Not in any specific words, but UHF stations were, uh, going through it at that time. Anyone in TV back in 1956 would have known this.
 * Noted.
 * "from Automated Electronics, Inc., of Dallas" — I do not think we need a comma after Inc. here.
 * "As part of his transition from an on-air personality to a media executive, he began going by Milton instead of Milt" — recommend "…media executive, Grant began going by Milton instead of Milt" to avoid repetition of pronouns.
 * Just curious: is there a reason Capital Broadcasting Company is not abbreviated like some of the other companies?
 * It's not really what comes to mind with "CBC". Also, there is a still-extant and operating Capitol Broadcasting Company, with an O, in North Carolina, and I wanted to avoid confusion with it.
 * Oh I see! That makes sense.
 * I reckon wikilinking construction permit is unnecessary as readers unfamiliar with building jargon will likely know what it means.
 * It has a specific meaning in broadcasting, so I think this is merited. I've had other reviewers ask for this link.
 * Wikilink tape delayed for unfamiliar readers.
 * Noted, thanks.
 * "continued to promote itself as a sports destination" — I may be in error but "destination" in this context sounds slightly on the informal side.
 * Wikilink road game.
 * Both "tape delayed" and "tape-delayed" are each used once in this article; choose one spelling variation for consistency.
 * Second one is a hyphenated adjective.
 * I see!
 * "For children, the station was the home of "Captain 20", a" sounds slightly editorialised; recommend rephrasing.
 * "From 1972 until his 1984 death" — recommend "From 1972 until his death in 1984".
 * The sentence starting "Despite being the second independent…" is a bit of a mouthful; perhaps create a new sentence for the Varity line as "It had, per Paul Harris in Variety,"?
 * "the station conducted a schedule overhaul, increased its sports and movie telecasts" needs an and to connect the sentences.
 * "investor Robert Bass, and while" — recommend a semi-colon instead of a comma.
 * "$200 million on January 1, 1988, and missed the first payment deadline" — how about but instead of and here?
 * Even though the article is titled UPN, I would wikilink United Paramount Network instead of the acronym as it looks rather strange and inconsistent. Same with the lead if you decide not to trout me for this.
 * "In 2000, Viacom purchased CBS." — wikilink CBS as first mention in the body.
 * "the United in UPN" — hm?
 * UPN was a partnership of United Television and Paramount.
 * Ooh!
 * Could Chris-Craft be wikilinked somewhere?
 * "over UHF channel 20" – already linked.
 * "including a new 8:00 p.m. prime time newscast" — perhaps wikilink prime time? Likewise for the lead.
 * In § Newscasts, are the paragraphs necessary? I reckon just being one should be fine.
 * Kept the first paragraph break — there is a very large time gap between the first and second efforts!
 * That looks much better!

Anything not bulleted above has been fixed. Also see below. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 04:03, 1 May 2023 (UTC)