Talk:WGBO-DT/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 22:33, 17 August 2022 (UTC)

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 22:33, 17 August 2022 (UTC)

Images are appropriately tagged.
 * Per WP:RS/PS, PR Newswire is not a reliable source.
 * Replaced with better sources.


 * "It was owned by the Grant Broadcasting System from 1986 to 1988, during which time it was the least successful station in its portfolio": two conflicting uses of "it"; I think this should be "It was owned by the Grant Broadcasting System from 1986 to 1988, during which time it was the least successful station in Grant's portfolio".
 * Fixed.


 * "The four bids merged in a settlement agreement": we only specify the role of Murchison and Focus; do we know anything about Lago Grande and AT&CC's interest?
 * They were reimbursed and bowed out. Addressed with a new reerence.


 * "its subscription offering, Spectrum, bowed on the 29th": I would guess "bowed" means it began broadcasting; if so I think we should use another word; I doubt this would be understood by readers with no background in the topic.
 * Tweaked.


 * "United launched the third and final HEN STV station": what does "HEN" mean? Probably "Home Entertainment Network" since we've just mentioned that, but if so I would add "(HEN)" after the first mention.
 * Tweaked to avoid gratuitous mention.


 * Suggest linking "wrote down" to Write-off.
 * Done


 * "United Cable sold the Chicago business to ON TV parent Oak Communications, and Spectrum subscribers began viewing ON TV programming on March 1, 1984": does this mean that both WSNS and WFBN viewers saw ON programming at this point? If so I think that should be clearer.
 * Yes, it does, but of course you had to be subscribed. Tried to make this clearer.


 * Not relevant for this GA nomination, but I'm curious: what's the purpose of the invisible comments saying e.g. "Mon" and "Fri"?
 * They are generated by PressPass, the utility I use to preformat newspaper citations from Newspapers.com. The main point is to provide the day of the week which can sometimes be useful in parsing newspaper articles.


 * There seems to be a syntax problem with the long sentence starting "With many program distributors..."; after the semicolon, the structure seems to be "after Metrowest filed a petion, claiming ", which is not a complete sentence. Is this meant to say that Focus and Grant's warning, earlier in the sentence, came after this filing by Metrowest?  If so a semicolon is wrong, but I'd rewrite anyway as it's too long to parse easily.
 * Woof, somehow that sentence got unwieldy. Four months later, I can say it stinks, and I rewrote it.


 * "After Time Warner announced the launch of The WB on November 2, 1993, the network had entered into discussions with WGBO to become the network's Chicago affiliate;": suggest cutting "had" unless there's a nuance here I'm not seeing. And I think the semicolon there is wrong -- they're used to join related ideas that have no direct syntactic relationship, but it looks like "even though..." is meant to relate to the first part of the sentence.
 * Woof, another bad area. This one was one I had kind of left untouched (and it had both of those PR Newswire items).


 * " Its schedule was partially cleared by a longtime independent and ethnic station, WCIU-TV (channel 26)." What does "cleared" mean here?
 * Cleared = aired. Very common in the trade. News outlets will say a syndicated show is "cleared" in 70% or 80% of the country or that a station "clears" network programming. This is something I'd like to keep as is.


 * "while the Mass moved to WEHS-TV": suggest "while the Catholic Mass moved to WEHS-TV" -- by this time I'd forgotten the earlier mention of broadcasting the Mass.
 * Done.

-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 00:34, 18 August 2022 (UTC)

Responded to everything. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 01:44, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good except that I think if you want to keep "cleared" (and I understand why) I think we have to have a link to an entry in glossary of broadcasting terms, or a footnote, or an inline explanation. It never occurred to me that that might be the meaning. Mike Christie (talk - contribs -  library) 01:59, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * @Mike Christie: Added a definition into the glossary. The earliest uses of this term go to the 1930s and were generally in the context of "time clearance" (clearing time on a station to make way for some network or syndicated program). Sammi Brie  (she/her • t • c) 18:04, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
 * Looks good; passing. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 18:19, 18 August 2022 (UTC)