Talk:Wallace (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 21:43, 28 August 2015 (UTC)


 * For the producer parameter, just include their surnames, no need to type in full again.
 * Done.  Azealia 911  talk


 * Banks isn't a label.
 * She's credited as a label with Prospect Park here.  Azealia 911  talk


 * Broke with Expensive Taste track listing → I don't see the point of including this. These links can be found in the template for Banks a the bottom anyway.
 * I disagree, it's a quick way of seeing where on the album the track is without moving onto the album's article. You also saw no problem with it the last time you reviewed a song from the same album which included the template?  Azealia 911  talk


 * To be honest I didn't notice it. But to have a template with 16 songs when only 6 have articles is not helpful and duplicates Bank's template. — Calvin999  05:26, 29 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Removed.  Azealia 911  talk


 * The song was released on November 7, 2014, along with the rest of the album, → It wasn't released as a single, so it's misleading to say that it was released on the day of the album release.
 * Removed.  Azealia 911  talk


 * "pounding" and "half-sung" with Banks "float[ing] between islandy R&B and rapid-fire, corner-side spitting". → What makes these quotes so special to include in the lead? Quotations in the lead require citations, and citations shouldn't really be in the lead. I suggest paraphrasing into your own words.
 * Changed.  Azealia 911  talk


 * deeming the song as a standout cut from the album. → with many deeming it as an album highlight.
 * Changed.  Azealia 911  talk


 * To promote Broke with Expensive Taste, Banks released a music video for "Wallace". → It's not promoting the album...
 * Why else would an artist release promotional materials for songs without their own album singles on digital purchasing platforms? Of course it's promoting the album, singles promote albums, concerts promote albums, music videos promote albums. Almost everything done around the time of an albums release is to promote the album, it's a promotional campaign after all.  Azealia 911  talk


 * A music video promotes a single, not an album. It's the "To promote Broke with Expensive Taste," part I have an issue with. — Calvin999  05:26, 29 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Removed.  Azealia 911  talk


 * The video was released on March 11, 2015, → Irrelevant info for the lead
 * Removed.  Azealia 911  talk


 * "Wallace" is a three minute and fifty second long hip hop song, → "Wallace" is a hip hop song that lasts for a duration of three minute and fifty seconds
 * a pounding beat. → Pounding is quoted in the lead?
 * I'm not sure what you're saying here.  Azealia 911  talk


 * You've presented it as a quote in the lead, indicating a critic said it, but here it's like your own word. — Calvin999  05:26, 29 August 2015 (UTC)
 * I see what you mean now, added quotation marks and ref.  Azealia 911  talk


 * The genres haven't got a citation so can you provide me with the link please.
 * Which instance would this be referring to?  Azealia 911  talk


 * Banks revealed that she first revived the instrumental for the song in 2007, → I think this needs rewording. If she used it for the first time in 2007, then doesn't that make Wallace a revival?
 * Revived was a typo, received was the proper wording, hopefully it makes sense now.  Azealia 911  talk


 * In 2011, it was reported that Banks was working on a studio album with British producer Paul Epworth despite not having signed to a record label at that time.[5] → This is completely irrelevant and has no bearing on this article
 * Removed.  Azealia 911  talk


 * Approximately a year later → You don't need approximately
 * Removed.  Azealia 911  talk


 * from the labels; → Not needed
 * Removed.  Azealia 911  talk


 * Hardeep Phull of →Hardeep Phull of the
 * Added.  Azealia 911  talk


 * On April 6, 2014, Banks uploaded two clips from the shooting to her Instagram account.[15] On March 10, 2015, a 25-second teaser for "Wallace" was uploaded on Banks' YouTube channel.[17] The full video was released on March 11, 2015, via Banks' official website.[18] → Boring flow and no connection from one sentence to the other. Like a list of facts.
 * Changed.  Azealia 911  talk


 * from the prior year. → from 2014
 * Changed.  Azealia 911  talk


 * midst controversy concerning Nicki Minaj and Taylor Swift centered around the fairness of the MTV Video Music Award nominees selection process, → Reads awkwardly
 * Changed.  Azealia 911  talk


 * Ref three has a double "" in the title. Use ' instead for titles
 * Changed.  Azealia 911  talk


 * External links: Provide a link to the video on Youtube?
 * It was never released onto YouTube.  Azealia 911  talk

On hold. — Calvin999 21:56, 28 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Outcome


 * Eurofan, just in case you see this, please don't start addressing these comments, I'll have them all done within thirty minutes (just to avoid frustrating edit conflicts)  Azealia 911  talk  22:05, 28 August 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the review.  Azealia 911  talk  22:25, 28 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Well done. Passing. — Calvin999  16:58, 29 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Cheers  Azealia 911   talk  17:00, 29 August 2015 (UTC)