Talk:Wally Hammond/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Staxringold talkcontribs 00:07, 2 April 2010 (UTC) As an American I am very uninformed on the details of cricket, so let me apologize up front if I make any stupid errors or ask any silly questions. However, this could be of assisstance as it will ensure the prose can be read and understood reasonably well by an outsider.
 * File:Wally Hammond.JPG has no source information.
 * I did not add this image so I don't know where it came from. Also, I'm not very good with images generally so advice would be appreciated.--Sarastro1 (talk) 11:34, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * It's a great image, but I would tend to say remove it. Without source information we have absolutely no idea if the copyright claim is valid or not. I'm going to slap a source lacking tag on it. Staxringold talkcontribs 15:25, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Yeah, looking at the uploader's talk page, seems like he's had several similar pics deleted for this reason. Staxringold talkcontribs 15:30, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Removed image for now unless someone can source it. I'll see if someone more image-minded than me can suggest another image which is more reliable. --Sarastro1 (talk) 23:05, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Promoted A lead image would be nice, but you have to go with what you have. Staxringold talkcontribs 23:55, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * As I understand it any image taken in Australia before 1955 is out of copyright and that image was certainly in Australia and pre 1955. Why is the source important as it simply cannot be under copyright? --LiamE (talk) 23:01, 6 April 2010 (UTC)


 * The lead sentence "In a Test career spanning 85 matches, Hammond captained England in 20, winning four, losing three and drawing 13" seems to (if I'm understanding) combine his general career with the subset of that when he was captain, but it comes off a little confusingly (particularly when followed by his overall batting statistics). Perhaps reorder, saying "In a Test career spanning 85 matches, he scored 7,249 runs and took 83 wickets. Hammond captained England in 20 of these Tests... [blah blah blah]."?
 * Done as suggested.--Sarastro1 (talk) 11:34, 2 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Maybe use See also for English cricket team in Australia in 1928–29 for "1928-29 tour of Australia" since it's about just the one tour.
 * Done --Sarastro1 (talk) 11:34, 2 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Can you give a brief summary of what "Bodyline" bowling is under "Bodyline tour"? It sounds vaguely like a brushback pitch in baseball, but it seems to play a relatively large role in his career so would be useful for the average uninformed reader.
 * Added some more info to explain it.--Sarastro1 (talk) 11:34, 2 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Link tonsillitis under loss of form?
 * Done --Sarastro1 (talk) 11:34, 2 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Link moving average when describing the blue line in the graph image?
 * Er.. Not actually sure what you mean here. Sorry! --Sarastro1 (talk) 11:34, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Next to retirement there is a graph of his career batting performance. The last sentence of the caption reads "The blue line is an average of his ten most recent innings." Could you change that to "The blue line is a moving average of his ten most recent innings."?
 * Done. --Sarastro1 (talk) 22:42, 2 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Does his death belong under the "Business" section?
 * Added new section for final years. --Sarastro1 (talk) 11:34, 2 April 2010 (UTC)

Great overall though! Amazing sourcing, I'd say this baby's up to FA snuff. Staxringold talkcontribs 00:41, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for comments so far! --Sarastro1 (talk) 11:34, 2 April 2010 (UTC)