Talk:Walther von Brauchitsch/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TheQ Editor (talk · contribs) 01:48, 27 September 2014 (UTC)

Glad to help. I haven't reviewed one for some time so please give me a few days. Cheers,  ΤheQ Editor   Talk? 01:48, 27 September 2014 (UTC)
 * No problem. Take all the time you need. Jonas Vinther (speak to me!) 13:19, 27 September 2014 (UTC)

Review
 * The lead doesn't say much about his personal life
 * I have added a section regarding his personal life. - JV


 * The section title says Early Life when it describes Braucitsch's life to when he was in the 30s.
 * Fixed. - JV


 * "born on October" not "born in October"
 * Fixed. - JV


 * Specify the date of when he was born
 * Fixed. - JV


 * The image File:Berlin Hauptkadettenanstalt 1900.jpg needs a proper caption. According to MOS, it has to be a full sentence.
 * Fixed. - JV


 * Is it "General Staff" or "General staff"?
 * It's "General Staff"; I have corrected all "General staff" mentions. - JV


 * "now disguised as" - present tense? Should it be "then disguised as" or "now disguised as"?
 * I believe it's a matter of opinion. Therefore, I have kept it as "now disguised as". - JV


 * "(in 1925)" - no brackets
 * Fixed. - JV


 * ". In 1937." -not a sentence.
 * Fixed. - JV


 * "So, when" - no comma
 * Fixed. - JV


 * "This turned out not be an easy task" - grammar issues.
 * I don't see any grammar issues. Are you sure? - JV


 * Perhaps link to "X-day" or "the invasion of France"
 * Already linked later in the article. - JV


 * The second blockquote shouldn't be needed. You can fit it right in the paragraph.
 * Fixed. - JV


 * "He was dismissed as Commander-in-Chief of the German Army on 19 December. He was transferred" nothing to connect the 2 sentences?
 * I connected the 2 sentences. - JV


 * In the "Death" section, why do you need two pairs of identical references to source the paragraph?
 * Good point, I fixed it. - JV


 * "they produced a son" - "she gave birth to a son"
 * Again, really a matter of opinion. - JV


 * It should mention how they got divorced.
 * I have added some information. - JV