Talk:Warda al-Yaziji

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I would work on your formatting a little bit more. I think you placed the tiers incorrectly under "Biography."

You cited many different sources which is really good. You also linked to a few other pages. These will help your article stick. The content was short, but really good. You really portray why your author is notable and deserves to be represented on Wikipedia.

You could possibly add a list of her works. It wouldn't hurt to add them in the article so people can see and read the works she has written.

Hpotter5 (talk) 17:47, 7 October 2014 (UTC)

Below is the revised first peer critique that I posted on Blackboard:

This is a very good article! There was a few typos throughout, so make sure to keep a look out for those. I'd suggest reading it from the bottom up to catch the typos. I understand that it's hard to find information about the writers, but could you possibly include a list of some of her work? Also, listed under the poetry section you begin to discuss her feminist activism. I think that you should either make a stronger connection between her poetry and her activism or consider making a section (perhaps called "feminist activism" that talks about feminism and other ideologies that impacted her life. -Adora

Hi Ashley,

Great job on your second draft! I can see that you have a solid understanding of how to balance enough information on your author's personal background and information on their literature. I think revising your article for typos and silly grammar mistakes would be beneficial, since I'm still finding them while reading through. After reading your article, I'm left wanting more. I still don’t know that much about your author's impact on literature. You wrote that your author represented a new renaissance. Could you expand on what that means and the impact of that renaissance on the Arab world? Also, you briefly mention that her writing is feminine. Could you talk more to that and give an example of a "feminine" line in her poetry.

I noticed you didn't make a new section but, I think your article would benefit from a new section. I think you should label it either 'impact' or 'feminist activism.' That section has good amount of information. I know it's tough finding information of these authors but, if you could expand more on her activism and impact your entire article would be stronger. Overall, great job! I'm excited to read this when it becomes an official Wikipedia page!

-Adora Adatiger96 (talk) 21:48, 12 October 2014 (UTC)

Ashley, I think you still need to work on formatting. Most Wikipedia articles begin with the synopsis and do not include a section with the subject's name. I would take away the "Warda al-Yaziji" section, and make the "Biography" and "Work" sections the same tier as "References."

I agree with Adora. I found a few spelling and grammar mistakes throughout the article. Just read the article aloud. You will be able to distinguish what does and does not sound correct.

You also have random text within the article that should not be there. Look within your first section and last section.

I think your content is very well researched. You include many references which will help your author become more notable to the Wikipedia editors. However, you would definitely benefit from including more information about the impact that your author and her writing has had on the feminist movement and community.

Hpotter5 (talk) 18:01, 13 October 2014 (UTC)