Talk:Warner Bros. Movie World/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 17:42, 6 October 2020 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the ✅ tag to state when something is addressed.  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs)

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

 * It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
 * It contains copyright infringements -
 * It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include,, or large numbers of , , or similar tags. (See also ). -
 * It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -

Lede

 * Add a WP:Short description. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:47, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * on the Gold Coast, Queensland, Australia - reword, it's either on the Gold Coast in Queensland, or its in Gold Coast, Queensland. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:47, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * ranked third in yearly attendance (behind Sea World and Dreamworld) for Australian theme parks. - is the third highest attended theme park in Australia, behind Sea World and Dreamworld. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:47, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * No link for Sea World? Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:47, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Dreamworld pipes to a redirect Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:47, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The park contains movie-themed rides, attractions and shows. - isn't that already implied with the theme sentence above? Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:47, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Various costumed characters regularly patrol the park to interact and take photos with guests. Each afternoon, characters participate in a parade along the park's Main Street. The park hosts several seasonal events annually, such as the Halloween-themed Fright Nights and Christmas-themed White Christmas. DC Rivals HyperCoaster, opened in 2017, is the most recent among the park's six operating roller coasters. - this doesn't really say anything, perhaps say that there are six coasters (maybe list them and their opening dates)? Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:47, 6 October 2020 (UTC)

General
Thank you for taking the time to review this article. I have on your suggestions except where outlined below: Really appreciate your helpful commentary. Keep the comments coming. —  CR 4 ZE (T &bull; C)  04:44, 7 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Hollywood interest in Australian film and actors grew rapidly during the 1980s. - is this saying Australian film/actors became interested in Hollywood, or that Hollywood became interested in Australian film/actors? Also needs a citation Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:58, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * film producer Dino De Laurentiis - reword to avoid WP:SEAOFBLUE. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:58, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * science fiction action film Total Recall. - big SEAOFBLUE. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:58, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * left the tanking DEG - "tanking" is probably a bit much here. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:58, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Just to say I won't bring up any more SEAOFBLUEs, but they'll all need fixing, there's quite a few. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:58, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * C.V. Wood ⋅- reword to fit title of page Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:58, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * lots of ", and..." - need to check and see if the comma is suitable. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:58, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Queensland Premier - you'll need to explain what this is as well as the link. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:58, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Batman Adventure – The Ride - pipes to "Batman Adventure – The Ride 2" which redirects to the first target? Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:58, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Lethal Weapon – The Ride - is linked twice with different pipes. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:58, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Far too many "see also". Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:58, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * A lot of duplicate links need tidying up. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:58, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * It is always "on the Gold Coast" not "in Gold Coast" (ie Ricki-Lee Coulter, Green Lantern Coaster). I can try on the Gold Coast in Queensland" if you prefer, although I think this reads a little awkward.
 * I do prefer "in Queensland", as it is how you read it. Not an expert. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:16, 8 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I've tried to tweak the lead a little per your comments, although I'm unclear how it serves the reader to list all six roller coaster and their opening dates. It s commonplace in amusement park leads to mention the park's last major ride addition (in this case, 2017's DC Rivals).
 * Ok, that's fine Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:16, 8 October 2020 (UTC)
 * The "Hollywood interest" is already covered by the citation to WP:RS (Local Hollywood book) in the next sentence and I'm wary of CITEKILL.
 * No problem. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:16, 8 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I have tried to recast phrases/remove links per SEAOFBLUE but note that policy says to do this when possible (I'd prioritise succinct prose over fragmented sentences to avoid SEAOFBLUE).
 * Sure. I worry about easteregg links, where it might make it sound like we have an article for a series term, when its actually two links next to each other. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:16, 8 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Replaced "tanking" with "failing"; an adjective is needed here for effect.
 * Fine. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:16, 8 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I fixed "Queensland Premier" so this should be clearer, but I don't see any service to the reader to explain what it is when it is linked.
 * No worries. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:16, 8 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Ran through and checked serial commas: note they are allowed to improve clarity and join two separate clauses. In Australian English we generally avoid them (checked MOS:ENGVAR)—as such, I removed several but kept some where I felt needed.
 * Sure. I have no issue with the oxford comma, so long as it consistent.Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:16, 8 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Fair comment about over-linking and I knew full well I'd get pinged for it. This was lower on my priority list (#1 was sourcing). Having removed (I think) all duplicates, I wonder if it would serve the reader better to have ride names re-linked in the "Park layout" section? Mind they are re-linked in the table (which is appropriate)...
 * I'm happy enough with just one link, tables, captions etc. can have the secondary links. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:16, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

GA Review

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Review meta comments

 * I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski  (talk • contribs) 17:42, 6 October 2020 (UTC)
 * I've added a few more comments above, which I recommend checking out, but nothing serious enough to delay a promotion. Well done. Best Wishes,  Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:17, 8 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks again, Lee. Really appreciate you taking the time to review. All the best! —  CR 4 ZE (T &bull; C)  12:58, 8 October 2020 (UTC)