Talk:Warrior Women with Lupita Nyong'o

Submission review & advice
@Erik, do you have time look at my first article attempt?

Dux96 (talk) 20:33, 17 September 2022 (UTC)


 * @331dot would appreciate your thoughts, too Dux96 (talk) 20:35, 17 September 2022 (UTC)


 * , looks like a good start, especially with substance! I would suggest the following:
 * Add an infobox
 * Expand the lead section to be more of a summary of the article body, per WP:LEAD
 * Write section headings in lowercase after the first word, e.g., "Critical response" and not "Critical Response"
 * Drop IMDb user ratings, and I don't think it's worth mentioning the lack of Rotten Tomatoes score either. Just dive straight into the reviews
 * For "In the media" section, I'm wary of quoting people involved with any film on their feelings about it. The emphasis should be on what independent sources thought of it.
 * The quote at the end of the "Summary" section is a bit lengthy and not "brief" as needed per MOS:QUOTE. I would summarize and paraphrase.
 * Hope that helps. Erik (talk &#124; contrib) (ping me) 12:49, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * @Erik good advice and thanks. Done, see revisions Dux96 (talk) 16:34, 18 September 2022 (UTC)