Talk:Washington, My Home/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MaranoFan (talk · contribs) 08:23, 21 March 2019 (UTC)

Hi, I'll be reviewing this article.-- N Ø  08:23, 21 March 2019 (UTC)

Top

 * "(sometimes styled "Washington My Home")" -- The more commonly used form would be "stylized"
 * The sentence after the first paragraph should be merged into it.

Predecessor

 * " It was debuted by the University of Washington Glee Club on Friday, December 13, 1907" -- It being Friday seems like an irrelevant detail and not worth being mentioned.
 * "'Washington Beloved' was declared the Washington state anthem on March 11, 1909" -- Add comma after "1909", and it may be helpful to link "state anthem" to National anthem
 * "Concurrent resolutions in joint session being only ceremonial expressions of the will of the legislature" -- The word "being" should be replaced by "were" as it makes more grammatical sense.
 * The word "however" is overused in this section, it could be removed from some of the sentences.

Composition and adoption

 * "In 1959 "Washington, My Home" was declared the state song" -- Comma needed after "1959"
 * "Other persons present as witnesses included" -- "Other people present as witnesses included"

1985 proposal

 * No issues.

2011 proposal

 * "In 2011 papers were filed" -- Missing comma after "2011"
 * Sir Mix-a-Lot's name should be written like that, not as "Sir Mixalot"

Reception

 * Add alt text to the image.

Legal status

 * No issues.

Outcome
Once all of the concerns are addressed, I will promote the article.- N Ø  08:23, 21 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks kindly for this thorough review, MaranoFan. I believe all the issues have been update now but please let me know if I've missed anything. Chetsford (talk) 04:11, 24 March 2019 (UTC)