Talk:Washington Park Historic District (Albany, New York)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer:  Andrewmc   123  16:29, 21 November 2010 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Some general rephrasing of certain sentences or phrases is required before its at GA standard. See details below.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * A few more references needed, particularly in the 'Monuments' section.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Prose
 * The first sentence of the lead needs rephrasing, especially at the phrase "is that city's premier park". Perhaps change 'that' to 'the'.
 * In the second paragraph in the lead, the phrase 'grace the streets' is possibly verging on WP:WTW in the Manual of Style.
 * In the section 'Cemetery and parade grounds' I suggest making some of the sentences slightly shorter, particularly the sentence beginning "In 1800 the land west of Knox Street...".
 * "A few such as 694 and 710 Madison..." - A few what?

References
 * Are there any more references for the Marinus Willet Memorial?


 * Just wanted to say that I've fixed some issues, and I'm working on others. Thanks for putting this on hold for a week, it may take that long for me to get to it. --Gyrobo (talk) 19:50, 21 November 2010 (UTC)