Talk:Waterloo Park, Norwich/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:16, 2 May 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * "the redesigned park was" so it was a park before? I see in the infobox a 1904 establishment so worth noting that the redesign was on the original 1904 park.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 14:05, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "as part of its design" not needed.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 14:06, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "have since then been made" no need for then.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 14:06, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "forced to close" no detail here or in the body, did COVID affect it?
 * ✅ More detail added. Amitchell125 (talk) 18:06, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * Probably also noting in the lead that it's listed.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 17:27, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "an idea which never materialised" well the idea materialised, the factory did not.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 14:08, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * Do we know what he was a Captain of? RN?
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 16:48, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * £ 37,000 - inflate.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 16:38, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * If you link tennis court, I think you can safely link pergola.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 16:50, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "due to it being" -> "as it is"
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 17:32, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "work done by" not keen on "done" perhaps "carried out" or "conducted"?
 * ✅ replaced with 'carried out by'. Amitchell125 (talk) 17:34, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * £5.6 million - put a non-breaking space between 6 and million.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 16:52, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "ex-offenders" link or clarify this presumably means people who have served a sentence in prison?
 * ✅ (linked) Amitchell125 (talk) 17:44, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "as run the café. The café was " repetitive.
 * ✅ Sentence amended, let me know if it still needs to be tweaked. Amitchell125 (talk) 17:37, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "January 2020.[17][18] maintenance work was begun " capital M and lose the "was begun" -> "began".
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 17:40, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "tree planting list for 2018–19, to include the planting of examples of trees " bit repetitive.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 14:24, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * "largest herbaceous borders located" link again.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 14:23, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * Ref 5 should be pp.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 14:21, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * ref 14 should use an en-dash for the page range.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 14:20, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * Ref 15 should use an en-dash instead of a spaced hyphen in the title.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 14:18, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * Ref 21, en-dash for year range.
 * ✅ Amitchell125 (talk) 14:16, 5 May 2021 (UTC)


 * Ref 29 just takes me to the bus company homepage, no PDF and no sign of the bus routes mentioned here.
 * ✅. Amitchell125 (talk) 14:14, 5 May 2021 (UTC)

That's all I have, neat article, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 09:27, 3 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Ok, all good, promoting. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 09:39, 6 May 2021 (UTC)
 * Many thanks! Amitchell125 (talk) 09:49, 6 May 2021 (UTC)