Talk:Wednesday Martin/Archive 2

Small adjustments to introduction
Hi again! I have a couple of remaining requests for this article. First up, I wanted to see if editors would be comfortable with some small edits to the introduction to simplify, better summarize and update the article. My suggestions are as follows:


 * Remove the following sentence: "She has also been a commentator on step-parenting, parenting, and motherhood."
 * In place of the above, add the following into the first line: "who writes and has been a commentator, and cite the following references (which are currently used at the end of the sentence above):
 * The aim of these first two adjustments is to make the introduction read better and reduce repetition
 * Add in "female sexuality" to the list of topics on which Wednesday writes and provides commentary, since this is not currently included but surely should be on the basis of her essays and most recent book
 * Adjust the sentence about her publications to begin ", she is the author of five books, including" so that the information is up-to-date as of this year
 * Add in "and" before The Daily Telegraph; this is just a small grammatical fix

In case it is helpful, here is the full text of my suggested wording for the introduction and the markup:

As with my previous requests above, I'm making these suggestions on behalf of Wednesday Martin, as part of my work at Beutler Ink. I will not make any edits to the live article myself, and am looking for an uninvolved editor to review and make changes as appropriate. Are you able to take a look at these suggestions, too? Thanks in advance! 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 21:28, 6 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Sounds good to me. I made some slight changes to your request since I think it'd flow a little better, but other than that, the gist of what you want is in. Zappa⚡Mati 03:29, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much, ZappaOMati! One follow-up: is it possible to add female sexuality to the list of topics that Martin writes about? Or did you prefer to leave that out? Thanks! 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 15:02, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
 * It's possible, I accidentally overlooked that part of the request while getting changes done. Zappa⚡Mati 23:57, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much for taking a look at that! I hate to be a bug: is it more appropriate to list it with her areas of writing vs. commentary, due to the focus of Untrue being female sexuality? Thanks for your patience with me! 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 21:47, 11 October 2018 (UTC)