Talk:Weldy Walker/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 23:07, 26 July 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this review. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks as always for the contributions. -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:07, 26 July 2013 (UTC)

Initial comments

 * http://avdbkr20.wikispaces.com/Final+Draft+of+Research+Paper seems unlikely to be a reliable source. Is it needed here?
 * It's not a GA-level issue, but it's a little confusing to have the first Peterson book reference appear as a partial reference, instead of putting the full reference first. Can this be flipped, or the full book citations moved to a "bibliography" subsection?
 * I've changed a few instances of "brother Fleetwood" to "Weldy's brother Fleetwood" to avoid making it sound like a title ("Brother Fleetwood").

Gotta break off here for a bit. Hope to pick this up and go to the end later tonight. -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:34, 26 July 2013 (UTC)
 * A bibliography would probably be better to avoid those jumps so I'll work on that. Removed the source since it wasn't needed anyway, was only used alongsid other citations. Wizardman  03:34, 27 July 2013 (UTC)


 * Is it possible to give a phrase of context on who Cap Anson is for clarity--"Chicago White Stockings player-manager Cap Anson" or some such?
 * Sol White could also use a phrase of context ("future Hall of Famer Sol White"?)

That's all I really have to suggest here. This seems solid and probably ready to pass; it's a well-written article on a fascinating bit of baseball history. I'd heard vaguely of the Walker brothers as footnotes to stories about Jackie Robinson, but it's interesting to learn more. Thanks again for your work on it. Let me do the checklist and make sure I'm not missing anything; I want to do a few spotchecks and go over the references again, too. -- Khazar2 (talk) 16:02, 27 July 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! Added clarification on those points. Wizardman  15:29, 30 July 2013 (UTC)