Talk:Welles Declaration/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wiz ard man  06:07, 24 December 2009 (UTC) Overall this is a pretty good article, though I do have a couple issues for fixing:
 * "After the outbreak of World War II and a startling string of Nazi victories," I'd remove startling, partially since it feels a little unneeded, plus what side/country is it startling to?
 * "Great Britain was early involved, and a series of German victories in Denmark, Norway, and the Netherlands during spring 1940 were alarming." The first part of the sentence needs rewording - "was early involved" sounds odd.
 * Avoid one sentence paragraphs; expand on the last sentence or combine it in somewhere.

I'll put this GAN on hold and pass when everything's fixed. Not much to handle, so it should only take a couple days. Wiz ard man 06:07, 24 December 2009 (UTC)
 * I think I addressed those issues now. Cheers, M.K. (talk) 08:32, 24 December 2009 (UTC)
 * Looks good now, so the article passes. Wiz ard man  15:11, 24 December 2009 (UTC)