Talk:Western Interior Seaway anoxia

Oliver's Comments
Well, clearly you are very knowledgeable on the subject and put a lot of work into this project. However, the reading level is just way too high, some words that i didn't even understand did not have links to them. The figures were very good, however the explanation needs to become more detailed to explain to somebody who is not as knowledgeable what the figures mean. Really, other than that, the page is fantastic. Simplification and easier vocabulary could help the basic reader out. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Onavo1 (talk • contribs) 19:58, 11 November 2012 (UTC)

Tara's Comments

 * > "exhibit unique paleoenvironments" => Verb + noun agreement. Even though they may be recognized by a similar environment, there were several.
 * > "orogeny" and "plates" should not be capitalized. Even though they are formal events or things, you don't capitalize them. I have used this to get a general guideline: http://geoweb.princeton.edu/beijingconference/AAPG_StyleGuidelines.pdf  This, of course, might be dependent on the style used for publication
 * > link to δ13C isotope page (if there is one) β
 * > Are "plays" a formal term for productive oil and gas reservoirs? Or is it slang? If slang, you should change it.
 * > You misspell Farallon plate a couple times.
 * > The way that you introduce nutrient sourcing and eutrophication is well-written but WAY over the heads of most basic readers. Another picture would be informative or just a brief explanation of this would be plenty.
 * > "Most potent water and water column stratification"? Error or missing word here?
 * > link to benthic, oxic, anoxic, dysoxic pages (if they exist)
 * > "effect" not "affect" in your box title
 * > Image 2: You abbreviated Ocean Anoxic Event with OAE but never spell out for reader. A legend would make immediate understanding easier than a description in your image box. What is green line? Tell us was VPDB is, or link to the Peedee Belemnite page is there is one. Also, you might want to make text bigger for the 13C labels.  Label y-axis with time.
 * > Image 1: Tell us what the black vectors are.
 * > How does the CO2, carbonate compensation, and shells come into play with all of this? Elaborate or get rid of it.

This page is incredibly detailed, informative, and well-written! However, this page is still too advanced for almost all readers. (Although, this topic does require somewhat of an advanced understanding of geologic and biological concepts to get the gist anyway.) I would highly recommend that you distill this page of jargon and all unnecessary information. Images are worth their weight in words, so a eutrophication image would help a lot in understanding what anoxia is in the first place for readers and what causes it. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Terranova274 (talk • contribs) 15:57, 14 November 2012 (UTC)

Zach's Comments
There isn't much to say this is a good page and you clearly know the subject but the reading level is too high. This is a fantastic page for someone knowledgeable about this and wants to learn more but it's too much for a high school student. The images are good. What do the black arrows in the second image represent? I'm not sure how much of the article you can take out but you need to trim it down and make it easier to understand. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Zkelly1 (talk • contribs) 22:38, 14 November 2012 (UTC)

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