Talk:What's a Nice Girl like You Doing in a Place like This?/GA1

GA Review
The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.''

Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 14:38, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

Shall be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 14:38, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * Delink black and white per MOS:OVERLINK
 * "The film is shot in 16 mm film and 9 minutes long. The film features animation, montage, jump cuts, associative editing, and freeze-frame shots." - think these sentences could be merged and shortened slightly
 * "Scorsese, said the film has no depth at all." - the comma is unneeded
 * "He directed the film shortly after watching Federico Fellini's surrealist comedy-drama 8½ (1963)" - Federico Fellini's 1963 surrealist comedy-drama 8½
 * "The film was supposed to be a horror film but it later turned out be a comedy." - intended
 * Also, repetition of the word "film" in the above sentence is not recommended
 * How about give a brief mention of the reception of the film by reviewers?

Summary

 * "(played by Zeph Michaelis)" - I don't think the wording such as "played by" is needed in all of the instances the phrase is mentioned in the section
 * "is a writer who buys a picture of a boat on a lake. He becomes obsessed with the picture." - how about merging these two sentences and shorting it slightly to avoid an almost CV-based stacatto
 * "he finds himself trapped inside of the picture." - inside of it.

Cast

 * "Credits adapted from British Film Institute." - from the British Film Institute.

Production

 * "The film is the first film of Martin Scorsese." - repetition of the word "film"
 * "What's a Nice Girl Like You Doing in a Place Like This? was supposed to be a horror film" - intended
 * "The film features music of Richard H. Coll," - the text in bold should be changed to either features the music of Richard H. Coll or music from Richard H. Coll,
 * "and it is edited by Robert Hunsicker." - was edited by Robert Hunsicker.
 * "after watching Federico Fellini's surrealist comedy-drama 8½ (1963) for the first time." - reduce the amount of links per MOS:SEAOFBLUE
 * "but the re-release is 10m 2s." - 10 minutes, 2 seconds.

Reception

 * "Martin Scorsese described the film as "a tale of pure paranoia"." - it should be just Scorsese per MOS:SURNAME
 * Briefly state who Annette Wernblad is
 * "Peter Galvin of Special Broadcasting Service wrote," - of the Special Broadcasting Service