Talk:What It Is to Burn/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 13:18, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

I recall you being respectful and patient after I delivered two reviews for you in the past; I will take this article on now as part of the GAN drive! --K. Peake 13:18, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * June–July, August–September 2001 → June–September 2001
 * Replace hlist with bullet points in the infobox
 * Target Pop punk to Pop-punk
 * Separate labels using bullet points
 * "released on March 12, 2002, jointly through" → "It was released on March 12, 2002, through" as a new sentence
 * "to Drive-Thru Records. Recording for their debut album" → "to Drive-Thru. Recording for the album"
 * Wikilink music video
 * "appeared in January 2003." → "was released in January 2003."
 * The last two sentences of this para should come directly after this one instead
 * "Initial touring to promote the album consisted" → "Initial accompanying tours for promotion consisted" and this belongs as the second sentence of the second para in the new order
 * "in the US and the UK" → "in the United States and the United Kingdom"
 * "The band also appeared at" → "The band later appeared on" and this should still follow the other tour sentence in the new order
 * "The album's title-track was released as a radio single in" → "The title-track "What Is It to Burn" was released as the lead single in" with the appropriate wikilink
 * "by "Letters to You" in April." → "by the single "Letters to You" in April of that year." with the appropriate target
 * "Double A-sided single "New Beginnings"/"What It Is to Burn" was released in August." → ""New Beginnings"/"What It Is to Burn" was released as the third and final single on a double A-side in August 2003."
 * Move the chart positions of the singles to being here, though they may be ordered more afterwards
 * "primarily a pop punk/emo release," → "primarily a pop punk and emo release," with the target
 * "is also classed as" → "was also classed as"
 * "It received a positive reaction from" → "The album received generally positive reviews from"
 * "with many finding it an enjoyable listen." → "being found as an enjoyable listen by many."
 * "The album charted at number 99 on the Billboard 200 in the US and at number 177 in the UK." → "On the US Billboard 200, What It Is to Burn charted at number 99, while it reached number 177 on the UK Albums Chart." with the wikilink and this should begin a third para
 * "album sales stood at over 400,000 copies." → "the album has sold over 400,000 copies worldwide."
 * "charted on the UK top 40 singles chart," → "charted at number 39 on the UK Singles Chart," with the wikilink
 * "the top 40 on the" → "the top 40 of the US"
 * "The album has since been" → "It has since been"
 * "the emo/post-hardcore scene." → "the emo and post-hardcore scenes."
 * "The band went on a" → "Finch embarked on a"
 * "tour for the album in 2013 through" → "tour in 2013 across"
 * "Japan and Australia." → "Japan, and Australia."

Background and production

 * "under the name Numb with" → "under the name of Numb, with"
 * "It was thought that" → "It was rumored that"
 * "though Finch has since" → "though Finch have since"
 * The source identifies the band as being named Evitca Fresh; fix this
 * "owner Richard Reines[1]" → "owner Richard Reines," and move [1] solely to the end of the sentence since it backs all of that up
 * Target fan letter to Fan mail
 * "Reines offered the group a chance to perform and" → "Richard offered the band a chance to perform for Drive-Thru Records and" per MOS:SAMESURNAME
 * "co-label owner, Stefanie" → "co-label owner, Stefanie Reines"
 * "were impressed and signed the group." → "were impressed by the performance and signed Finch afterwards."
 * Wikilink Escondido, California
 * "in February and April 2001." → "in February and April of 2001."
 * "They began recording" → "Finch began recording"
 * "in June[5]" → "in June of that year" and move [5] solely to the end of the sentence after [4]
 * "tracking guitars in July." → "tracking guitars for the album in July 2001."
 * "amplifiers. Linares used" → "amplifiers, while Linares used"
 * "helped with the album's with guitar effects." → "with the guitar effects on What It is to Burn."
 * "into August and September." → "throughout 2001, going into August and September."
 * "The group met Palumbo at" → "Finch first met Palumbo at"
 * "show and had kept in" → "show, and had kept in"
 * "While they were recording, they asked him" → "While they were recording for the album, the band asked Palumbo"
 * "Trombino did programming" → "Trombino completed programming"
 * Target mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
 * Target mastered to Mastering (audio)

Composition

 * Retitle to Composition and lyrics
 * "Musically, the album has been" → "Musically, What It Is to Burn has been"
 * Target pop punk to Pop-punk
 * Remove [14] since not only is four sources enough to be together, but any more is too much to back up the genre
 * "The release drew comparisons to" → "The album received comparisons to the music of"
 * "Linkin Park and" → "Linkin Park, and"
 * "crooning and screaming;" → "crooning and screaming on What It Is to Burn;" with the target
 * "around the group jamming." → "around Finch jamming."
 * "said they could write a song" → "said they could sometimes write a song"
 * "before shifting to aggressive" → "before the song shifts to aggressive"
 * Wikilink power chords instead of the full two words
 * "It sets the tone for the album" → "The song sets the tone for What It Is to Burn"
 * "memorable melodies' parts and tuneful choruses." → "memorable melodies and tuneful choruses." with the target
 * "on "Letters to You" bordered on" → "on "Letters to You" border on"
 * "was one of the group's oldest songs," → "was one of Finch's oldest songs,"
 * "said was about a couple" → "said is about a couple"
 * "addressing a letter" → "sending a letter"

Release

 * Retitle to Release and promotion
 * "The Falling into Place EP was released" → "Finch's debut EP Falling into Place was released"
 * [25] should solely be at the end of the sentence
 * "A music video was released for "Letters to You" in" → "A music video for "Letters to You" was released in" with the wikilink
 * ""[a]trocious", while" → ""[a]trocious," while"
 * "On January 13, "Untitled" was" → "On January 13, 2001, the track "Untitled" was"
 * Target MCA to MCA Records
 * "and measurements. The back cover" → "and measurements, while the back cover"
 * [7] offers mention of the beaker with boiling liquid but not it being on the back cover
 * "boiling liquid. Doherty said they" → "boiling liquid; Doherty said the band"
 * "cool imagery"." → "cool imagery.""
 * "It was replaced on later pressings" → "The demo was replaced on the later pressings"
 * "The UK edition," → "The United Kingdom edition,"
 * Target acoustic to Acoustic music
 * "The group filmed another music video for" → "Finch filmed a new music video for"
 * "in mid-April 2002[31]" → "in mid-April 2002,[31]"
 * "on May 24." → "on May 24, 2002."
 * "the group signed to" → "the band signed to"
 * Wikilink distribution deal
 * "was released as a radio single[37]" → "was released to radio stations across the United States as the lead single from What Is It to Burn,[37]" with the wikilink
 * "the track[12] with director Alexander Kosta." → "the track,[12] which was directed by Alexander Kosta.
 * "on February 21, 2003." → "on February 12, 2003."
 * "In March, Punknews.org held" → "In March of that year, Punknews.org held"
 * Target vinyl to Phonograph record
 * "On April 22, "Letters to You" was released as a single." → "On April 22, 2003, "Letters to You" was released on CD as What Is It to Burn's second single." with the targets
 * "and "Letters to You"." → "and "Letters to You" as bonus tracks."
 * "Following this," → "Following on from this,"
 * "as a double A-sided single on August 25." → "on a double A-sided as the album's third and final single on August 25, 2003." with the target

Touring

 * Retitle to Tours
 * "Following the album's release, the group" → "Following the release of What It Is to Burn, Finch"
 * "In April and May 2002, the group went on tour with" → "In April and May of 2002, the band toured with"
 * "Following this, the group" → "After this, they"
 * Remove wikilink on New Found Glory
 * "the group performed on" → "Finch performed on"
 * [47] should solely be at the end of the sentence before [48]
 * "the Drive-Thru Records Stage." → "the Drive-Thru Records stage."
 * "In late August, the group performed" → "In late August of 2002, the band performed"
 * "In September, the group performed" → "The following month, Finch performed"
 * "In October and November," → "In October and November of 2002,"
 * "went tour across the US alongside" → "embarked on a tour across the US with"
 * "In November and December, the group" → "In the last two months of the year, Finch"
 * [52] should solely be at the end of the sentence before [53]
 * "with From Autumn to Ashes and" → "with From Autumn to Ashes as well as"
 * [54] should solely be at the end of the sentence
 * "January and February 2003." → "January and February of 2003."
 * "initially planned to support before being" → "initially planned to be the support act, before they were"
 * "went on a co-heading US tour" → "went on a co-headlining US tour"
 * "Following this, the group continued touring" → "Following on from this, Finch continued touring"
 * [57] should solely be at the end of the sentence before [58]
 * "until early March." → "until early March of 2003."
 * "In March, the group went" → "That same month, the band went"
 * "In April, the group performed" → "In April 2003, they performed"
 * "In early May, the band performed at" → "In early May of 2003, Finch performed for"
 * "In June, the band" → "The following month, the band"
 * "appeared on Jimmy Kimmel Live![62]" → "appeared on Jimmy Kimmel Live!,[62]"
 * "at KROQ's Weenie Roast festival." → "at the KROQ Weenie Roast festival."
 * "In early July, the group appeared" → "In early July of 2003, Finch appeared"
 * "In August, the group performed" → "The following month, they performed"

Reception

 * Retitle to Critical reception and I will elaborated on the new order below
 * Target FasterLouder to Junkee Media

Critical response

 * This should not be under a sub-section; it should be the only part of the Critical reception section
 * "was received positively for the most part by" → "was met with generally positive reviews from"
 * "calling the release "phenomenal", noting that the group" → "calling the album "phenomenal," noting that Finch"
 * "The record "exemplifies" → "He also wrote that the album "exemplifies"
 * "punk scene", going on to list" → "punk scene," citing"
 * "specific sound. The album showcases the group's" → "specific sound, observing that the album showcases their"
 * "perky rock" incorporating Glassjaw," → "perky rock," incorporating Glassjaw,"
 * Wikilink Molotov cocktail
 * Remove The Gateway per WP:RSSM
 * "referred to the release as an" → "referred to What It Is to Burn as an"
 * Target FasterLouder to Junkee Media
 * "described it an" → "described it as an"
 * Wikilink chord progressions
 * "to the release which" → "to the album, which"
 * "He commended the band" → "He commended Finch"
 * "said it had "perfect mix" → "said the album has "the perfect mix"
 * "the extra edge"," → "the extra edge,""
 * "Ultimate Guitar hailed the release," → "The team from Ultimate Guitar hailed the album,"
 * "and lacked any" → "and lacks any"
 * "said the group" → "commented that Finch"
 * Wikilink punk rock
 * Target metal to Heavy metal music
 * "she felt the lyrics" → "she felt that the lyrical content on What It Is to Burn"
 * "said the group bounced" → "said the band bounced"
 * "bubbly beats", a fusion which" → "bubbly beats," a fusion that"
 * "of charisma", he added." → "of charisma," Lecaro added."
 * "criticized the song titles, saying that the band" → "criticized the titles of the songs on the album, saying that Finch"

Commercial performance and legacy

 * This should be its own section
 * "at number 99 on the" → "at number 99 on the US"
 * Remove Heatseeker Albums as it is non-notable
 * The April 2003 figures should be in the sentence after the first instead
 * "It also charted at number 177 in the UK. "Letters to You" charted in the UK at number 39." → "It charted at number 177 on the UK Albums Chart, while "Letters to You" reached number 39 on the UK Singles Chart." with the wikilinks
 * "charted at number 15 on the" → "peaked at number 15 on the US"
 * [75] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [76]
 * Target Mainstream Rock to Mainstream Rock (chart)
 * "the album had sold over 400,000 copies." → "What It Is to Burn had sold over 400,000 copies worldwide."
 * Rankings should be at the start of the second para
 * "included the album's title-track on their list" → "included "What It Is to Burn" at number 47 on their list" since otherwise it sounds like an unordered list
 * "said the album was" → "said What It Is to Burn was"
 * "leading the genre" → "noting it for leading the genre"
 * "In 2013, the group" → "In 2013, Finch"
 * "It was initially" → "The celebration was initially"
 * "released a live/video album from this tour" → "released a live video album of the anniversary celebrations"
 * "The album has been" → "What It Is to Burn has been"
 * "Finch's use of" → "Finch's mix of"
 * Remove wikilink on A Day to Remember

Track listing

 * Wikilink Mark Trombino
 * re-recorded from the Falling into Place EP → re-recorded from the EP Falling into Place, but with no target on the second mention

Personnel

 * Split P.R. Brown and Kris McCaddon from the previous two names under production into their own sub-heading; title this fourth one Design

Chart positions

 * Retitle to Charts
 * Remove non-notable Heatseeker Albums chart

Final comments and verdict

 * until the issues are fixed, though I suspect you should go through this quite well. --K. Peake 16:42, 9 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Done. Yeepsi (talk) 18:01, 9 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Did some minor copy editing, but I am very impressed with you quick response rate and how great the work itself is! ✅ time. --K. Peake 07:02, 10 October 2020 (UTC)