Talk:What You Know Bout Love/GA1

GA Review
The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.''

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:06, 4 January 2021 (UTC)

Haven't reviewed an article of yours in a while after you did spend a good amount of time away from Wiki and I will happily take this one on now! --K. Peake 17:06, 4 January 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * WP:OVERLINK of Pop Smoke under songwriters
 * Target Tash to Tash (rapper) in the infobox
 * Music video title should have correct capitalisation for the song's title
 * ❌ --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "Pop Smoke, from his debut studio album" → "Pop Smoke from his debut studio album,"
 * "Bashar Jackson, Tashim Zene," → "Bashar Jackson, alongside Tashim Zene,"
 * "Elgin Lumpkin and Troy Oliver." → "Elgin Lumpkin, and Troy Oliver."
 * "The song's production was" → "Its production was"
 * "It was released as the fifth single" → "The song was released as the fifth and final single" with the target, plus there should be a full-stop before this to end the previous sentence
 * Remove wikilink on Ginuwine
 * ❌ --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * The R&B track part should have "musically" removed and come before the sample info instead, plus change that to ""What You Know Bout" samples" with the target
 * ❌ I meant merge these two parts as one sentence, plus remove the music journalists bit that you have added. --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Still ❌. --K. Peake 09:58, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "it showcases Pop Smoke sing about how he woos" → "Lyrically, it showcases Pop Smoke singing about his passion for" since that is more encyclopaedic
 * "It received positive reviews from critics," → "The song received generally positive reviews from music critics," with the target
 * You have not added the target. --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Still ❌. --K. Peake 09:58, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Why is it not mentioned in the lead that his lyrics were praised as well as his singing range?
 * ""What You Know Bout Love" peaked at number 25" → "It peaked at number 25"
 * "within the top five of five countries," → "within the top five of four other countries," to not only avoid repetition of info but repetitive wording
 * The certifications sentence is missing a full-stop
 * "of Pop Smoke and fans" → "of the rapper and his fans" to avoid stating his name too much

Background and composition

 * "What You Know bout Love" fix capitalisation with the penultimate word
 * "he was about it" → "he was about the song"
 * Target sample to Sampling (music)
 * Wikilink YouTube
 * [1] should solely be at the end of the para since it is the only source
 * "they thought that was" → "that they thought was"
 * "always wanted it" → "always wanted the song"
 * Wikilink Playboi Carti
 * "saw a snippet of → "he saw a snippet of"
 * "He admitted he didn't know where" → "He admitted to not having known where"
 * Remove wikilink on YouTube
 * "Bashar Jackson, Tashim Zene," → "Bashar Jackson, alongside Tashim Zene,"
 * Target Elgin Lumpkin to Ginuwine
 * Wikilink Troy Oliver
 * "was handled by" → "were both handled by"
 * Target Jess Jackson to Jess Jackson (record producer)
 * ❌ --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "and Sean Solymar." → "and Sean Solymar served as assistant engineers."
 * Target programming to Programming (music)
 * Mention what radio stations the song was released as a single to; is it UK mainstream radio here or a different format?
 * ❌ --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * It was released worldwide. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 09:32, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove wikilink on Ginuwine
 * ❌ --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "one of several tracks" → "standing as one of several tracks"
 * "that the song was a "Poop" → "that the song is a "[p]oop"
 * ❌ even though you have changed the quoting, it should still be "is" instead of "was". --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Where does The Independent ref source that the lover is a female that he is detailing and trying to please?
 * What's your response to this query?? --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "They continue, saying" → "They continued, saying"
 * "They state that" → "The staff stated that"

Critical reception

 * Retitle to Reception because there are accolades at the end
 * "the song shows that Pop Smoke" → "the song shows Pop Smoke"
 * "into multiple genres"." → "into multiple genres."" for consistency
 * "big to contain"." → "big to contain.""
 * "along with the album tracks" → "along with fellow album tracks" to be more specific
 * "even sometimes tender"." → "even sometimes tender.""
 * "In their album review," → "In her album review," because "their" implies it is the publication's staff or any other group/person who the genre of is unknown
 * Target chorus to Refrain
 * "admission of weakness"." → "admission of weakness.""
 * August Brown's review is included here twice; remove the second instance
 * "give "Ginuwine's 2001" → "gives "Ginuwine's 2001"
 * The last two reviews should be in the first para instead since the second should only be for the two accolades; this number is not enough for a sub-section
 * "the song strayed Pop Smoke from his" → "the song strays from Pop Smoke's"
 * Target drill to Drill music
 * Target trap to Trap music
 * "origins", and said it was" → "origins," and said it is"
 * Why is the Uproxx review after the Slant Magazine one when it is more receptive?
 * "placed the song at" → "placed "What You Know Bout Love" at"
 * The 2020 best tracks of 2020 → The 20 Best Tracks Of 2020
 * "saying it was a" → "calling it a"
 * "and commented it was" → "as well as"

Commercial performance
❌, every song article always has the commercial section before the music video. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 08:50, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * This should be after the music video section
 * Not necessarily, but this is not really offending anyone so you don't need to switch. --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "It has further peaked at number 7" → "It further peaked at number seven" per MOS:NUM
 * Remove over usage of "has". --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Still ❌. --K. Peake 09:58, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "It rose to number nine" → "The song climbed to number nine"
 * Cite Pop Smoke's chart history at the end of this sentence instead, as that verifies it being his third top 10 hit
 * "later rose to number 4" → "later rose to number four" and you should cite the chart from the table by using a ref name here instead, to avoid repeated refs
 * "The single peaked at number 16" → ""What You Know Bout Love" peaked at number 16"
 * This was implemented properly, but why did you merge the two paras when the number of sentences did not change? --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Still ❌ for splitting the paras back to what they were before. --K. Peake 09:58, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * "It was certified 2× platinum by" → "It was certified double platinum by"
 * "peaked at number 6 and was certified a platinum certification by the" → "peaked at number six and received a platinum certification from"
 * Remove "the" since Recorded Music NZ (RMNZ) does not have that at the start of their name like other certification organizations. --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Still ❌ for the last point. --K. Peake 09:58, 5 January 2021 (UTC)


 * Top five info should come before top 10 since not only are the positions higher, but the top five mentions New Zealand's fellow Oceania country Australia

Background and synopsis

 * Img looks good
 * Wikilink music video
 * "The music video opens with a video" → "The visual opens with a video"
 * Remove excess spacing at the end of the sentence
 * "The visual features" → "The video includes"
 * Remove wikilink on TikTok

Critical reception

 * Remove introduce to Revolt
 * "described the songs music video as "bittersweet"." → "described the video as "bittersweet."" since the former is too wordy
 * "comments that the video" → "commented that the visual"
 * "but says it" → "but said it"
 * "He continues, saying it" → "He continued, admitting that"

Personnel

 * Retitle to Credits and personnel
 * Wikilink and target all of the people where you can
 * Change writer to songwriter

Weekly charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Year-end charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION

Certifications

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * Australia certification is not backed up by the URL; add an appropriate archive to fix this

Final comments and verdict

 * for a week since I know you are somewhat busy with other ventures currently; I have noticed that your skills as an editor have approved by a considerable amount though! --K. Peake 08:03, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review Kyle! All of your issues have been addressed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 08:50, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * You missed a few points, which I covered above but thank you for the quick response. --K. Peake 09:24, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * , done. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 09:32, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * You need to implement all of the changes marked as not done... --K. Peake 09:37, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Kyle Peake, I did. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 09:41, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Not fully; I will point out above where changes still need to be made. --K. Peake 09:58, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Kyle Peake, I cannot find the regular link for the bbc source anywhere. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 17:07, 5 January 2021 (UTC)
 * I fixed the reference for you and added its status as a dead URL, plus thank you for implementing the suggested changes even though I did some copy editing in the lead where my suggestions seem to have come across as confusing to you. ✅ and I did remember to fix the target for music critics as well! --K. Peake 17:30, 5 January 2021 (UTC)