Talk:Whatcha Think About That/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 18:00, 22 March 2021 (UTC)

The most recent songs GAN; I will start reviewing this on shortly! --K. Peake 18:00, 22 March 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * The Pussycat Dolls → the Pussycat Dolls per MOS:THEMUSIC
 * ✅ changed.


 * Avoid the usage of the word studio in the parameter of the same name per Template:Infobox song
 * ✅ Removed the word "studio".


 * Pipe Mickaël Furnon to Mickey 3D
 * ✅ Piped.


 * Link to the music video in the infobox with the template (LpGFhuokOXw)
 * ✅ Link added.


 * "The Pussycat Dolls from their second studio album" → "the Pussycat Dolls for their second studio album,"
 * ✅ Changed.


 * "features American rapper Missy Elliott who" → "features a guest appearance from American rapper Missy Elliott, who"


 * "with song's producer" → "with the song's producer"


 * You should list Mickaël Furnon as being a writer in the above sentence, who "received songwriting credit due to his work being sampled with the pipe and also pipe his name to Mickey 3D
 * ✅ Piped and piped.


 * Move the actual sample to being in the same sentence as the electropop and midtempo info directly before the riff, plus just write the artist it is by
 * ✅ Moved the sample in the same sentence with the genres


 * "The song was released on" → "It was released on"


 * Pipe single to Single (music)
 * ✅ Piped.


 * "and February 23, 2009" → "and on February 23, 2009"
 * ✅ + "on".


 * You should change the role reversal part to being its own sentence, starting with "Lyrically, the Pussycat Dolls..."
 * ✅ Included the role reversal part in a new sentence.


 * "and her song, "I Kissed a Girl" (2008)." → "and her song "I Kissed a Girl"." since release year is unnotable for the lead
 * ✅ Removed the year.


 * Pipe music critics to Music journalism
 * ✅ Piped.


 * "the song's production and Elliot's contribution," → "the production and Elliot's vocals,"
 * ❌ Critics mostly referred to Elliot's rapping and rhyming, not her vocal capabilities. --MrHyacinth (talk) 18:42, 23 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Shouldn't you mention Fosse's full name?
 * The dance and Broadway communities often use his last name. ex. Fosse moves, Fosse dance. Note: There is also a musical based on his choreography, Fosse. --MrHyacinth (talk) 18:42, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I did not have awareness of that before but with the knowledge I now have, I'd say you needn't change this. --K. Peake 21:09, 23 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "in a burlesque lounge." → "in burlesque areas." per the body
 * ❌ In the video there is a neon sign that says, "Pussycat Doll Lounge" --MrHyacinth (talk) 18:42, 23 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "The group performed the song in few" → "The Pussycat Dolls performed the song for a few"

Background

 * Retitle to Background and release
 * ✅ retitled.


 * "by its producer" → "by its sole producer"


 * "Missy Elliott and Mickaël Furnon" → "Missy Elliott, and Mickaël Furnon" with the pipe
 * ✅ Piped.


 * Pipe rock to Rock music
 * ✅ Piped


 * "Dean handled as well the vocal production" → "Dean handled the vocal production as well,"


 * "Aubry "Big Juice" Delaine and Matt Wheeler with" → "Aubry "Big Juice" Delaine, and Matt Wheeler, with"


 * Pipe mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
 * ✅ Piped


 * "Elliott is the first" → "She is the first" to avoid starting two sentences with her surname
 * ✅ I'll start avoiding that!


 * Introduce Nicole Scherzinger as being a group member
 * ✅ I wrote "lead singer" instead; is that ok?


 * "elevates the group to" → "elevated the group to"


 * Introduce Kimberly Wyatt as being a fellow member


 * "on the group's website and was available for" → "through the Pussycat Doll's website for" to avoid being overly wordy


 * Change date to August 29, 2008 per the source
 * ✅ Changed


 * Italicise Rap-Up
 * ✅ Italiszed.


 * "unveiled the cover art confirming" → "unveiled the cover art, confirming"
 * ✅ added the comma.


 * "to be released after" → "to be released as the follow-up to their single" with the pipe


 * Identify contemporary hit as contemporary hit radio


 * "was available for digital download" → "was made available for digital download in the country"


 * "as the third single" → "standing as the third single"


 * Change to mention that it coincided with their schedule for the Doll Domination Tour and specify what you mean by the isles

Composition

 * Retitle to Composition and lyrics
 * ✅ retitled


 * ""Whatcha Think About That" is an" → "Musically, "Whatcha Think About That" is an"
 * ✅ added "musically,"


 * "song with elements of" → "song, with elements of"
 * ✅ + comma


 * Add a mention of the sample here, as it is key comp info and is fine to be repeated when you are not using the writers as previous
 * Do I need to mention Jane Birkin? --MrHyacinth (talk) 19:39, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
 * This is the comp section so the sample is obviously most notable here, plus repeating things in articles is acceptable if only certain parts are wrote again, i.e do not reinstate the songwriter, though use Birkin's surname here instead. --K. Peake 21:09, 23 March 2021 (UTC)


 * [12] is not needed at the middle of the sentence when it is already at the end
 * ✅ removed


 * [11][13][12] should be put in numerical order
 * ✅ in numerical order now


 * "different activities such as" → "different activities, such as"
 * ✅ comma added


 * "noted the group sounded" → "noted the group sound"
 * ✅ this correction sounds better


 * "and empowered,"[16] and" → "and empowered",[16] and" per MOS:QUOTE


 * "described as "resourceful."" → "described as "resourceful"."


 * Italicise Idolator
 * ✅ italicized


 * "three verses from Missy Elliott, who joins the group" → "three verses from Elliott, who joins the Pussycat Dolls"
 * ✅ italicized


 * "boy-baiting session,"[20][11]" → "boy-baiting session",[11][20]"


 * "with the lyric," → "with the line,"

Critical reception

 * Merge with the below section and retitle to Reception, as the following one is only a para long


 * "called it a" → "called "Whatcha Think About That" a"


 * Fix MOS:QUOTE issues throughout this section


 * "considered the song an exception in an album that" → "considered the former an exception to how Doll Domination"


 * "the group has recorded and described it" → "the Pussycat Dolls has recorded and described the track"


 * "to Elliott adding" → "to Elliott, adding that"
 * ✅ + comma


 * "who is sleepwalking adding" → "who is sleepwalking, adding"
 * ✅ + comma


 * "Maura Johnston of Idolator criticized Scherzinger for "whining and preening" and" → "Johnston criticized Scherzinger for "whining and preening", and"

Chart performance

 * This should be merged as the third para of the above section


 * "the track the track peaked at" → "the track peaked at"


 * "In the United Kingdom," → "In the UK,"


 * Identify the above chart


 * "their previous single, "I Hate This Part"" → "their previous single "I Hate This Part""


 * "of the top-forty." → "of the top-40." per MOS:NUM


 * "her first top-ten entry" → "her first top-10 entry"


 * "of 200,000 units." → "of 200,000 units in the UK."


 * "as their ninth" → "as the Pussycat Dolls' ninth"


 * "on the singles chart." → "on the UK Singles Chart."

Music video

 * Merge with the below section and retitle to Music video and promotion, per earlier
 * Img looks good, but wikilink music video on the text
 * ✅ Also underlined that in this scene they are wearing the specific clothing/


 * "two days ending in" → "two days, ending on"


 * "like Wyatt began to" → "like Wyatt, began to"
 * ✅ + comma


 * Pipe AOL Music to AOL
 * ✅ piped


 * "the group released a" → "the Pussycat Dolls released a"


 * Remove wikilink on Rap-Up and italicise, plus remove the punctuation from inside the sentence's quote
 * Which punctuation? I am confused --MrHyacinth (talk) 19:19, 24 March 2021 (UTC)
 * It has since been altered, but you need to remove the f after the end of the quote. --K. Peake 20:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove wikilink on Rap-Up and italicise, plus introduce Melody Thornton as a group member
 * ✅ Introduced.


 * "said, that the choreography will be" → "described the choreography as"


 * Shouldn't you mention Fosse by full name?
 * "Throughout the video the group is wearing" → "Throughout the video, the Pussycat Dolls wear"


 * "her verse and is intercut" → "her verse, which is intercut"


 * None of the para after the colon is sourced apart from the quote in the following sentence; this needs sourcing due to not adhering to MOS:TVPLOT
 * Can I use the music video as a reference?--MrHyacinth (talk) 19:19, 24 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Read the MOS guideline to get a proper understanding. --K. Peake 20:59, 24 March 2021 (UTC)


 * "Then the video" → "Then, the video"
 * ✅ Comma added.


 * ""dominatrix-style swings."" → ""dominatrix-style [...] swing[s]"."


 * "lounge and prepare themselves" → "lounge, and prepare themselves"


 * "to go on perform onstage." → "to go perform onstage."


 * "with the Dolls next" → "with the Pussycat Dolls next"


 * "outfits performing a" → "outfits, performing a"


 * Wikilink salutes like this instead per WP:NOPIPE


 * "surrounded by the group" → "as she is surrounded by them"


 * "of Dolls silhouette while their dancing." → "of a Dolls' silhouette while they are dancing." unless it is the silhouette of multiple Dolls or the group themselves, then reword accordingly (use full group name for the latter)

Live performances

 * Make this the third para of the above sentence


 * "on October 28, 2008 on" → "on October 28, 2008 for"


 * Remove wikilink on Rap-Up and italicise


 * "sounded a mess."" → "sounded a mess"." per MOS:QUOTE


 * "during their headlining," → "during their headlining"
 * ✅ removed comma

Track listing and versions

 * Shouldn't the Digital download releases have US before them like you've done with UK for the other ones?
 * Fair point, but I think an editor added the "UK" in reference to the mobile carriers. --MrHyacinth (talk) 19:26, 24 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Missy Elliott on first mention
 * ✅ Linked.

Credits and personnel

 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel


 * Add a specific order here; recording and mixing credits being grouped separately, songwriters being after other credits, etc. shows this is out of order
 * It's in alphabetical order based on their last names. --MrHyacinth (talk) 19:35, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Weekly charts

 * Good

Year-end charts

 * (Official Charts Company) → (OCC)

Certifications

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * ✅ Caption added.

Release history

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION
 * ✅ Caption added.


 * Worldwide → Various, as I doubt the song was released in every country on Earth
 * ✅ Changed.


 * CD Single → CD single
 * ✅ Changed.

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 10:06, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
 * I think I resolved the above issues. Waiting for your feedback!
 * I did some brief copy editing in areas where issues had inadvertently been edited in, but you still need to change to the Pussycat Dolls in the infobox. Also, make sure to sign posts off in the future, like this... --K. Peake 07:32, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Sorry, forgot to sign off. I did the info box changes, but personally for me it does look awkward. --MrHyacinth (talk) 16:44, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ now; I get the feeling you were alluding to at points myself, but MOS has got to be followed to a certain degree (obviously not pulling out all the guidelines per What the Good article criteria are not). --K. Peake 16:53, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Oh no! I was referring to the "the Pussycat Dolls singles chronology" in the infobox. I'm not used to it. Thank you so much for your thorough review, it was my first nomination, so I was a bit nervous! --MrHyacinth (talk) 17:53, 25 March 2021 (UTC)