Talk:Whatever (Ayumi Hamasaki song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 07:34, 18 June 2015 (UTC)

Hello, I'm Calvin999 and I am reviewing this article.


 * Review
 * Multiple dead link
 * Use Flat list templates for the genres, record labels, writers etc. in the info box
 * The certification parameter in the info box is redundant now, no on uses it.
 * Does Japan follow British or American system for dates?
 * The first paragraph has no flow at all, just lots of short sentences, and is boring to read.
 * some who commended the production and lyrical content. → And? What is this telling the read? Needs re-phrasing
 * However, some critics dismissed the vocal delivery and composition. → You can't really dismiss a vocal delivery
 * Released in Japan and Taiwan, it peaked at number five on the Oricon Singles Chart. → is Oricon Japanese or Taiwanese?
 * It has also appeared on several tours and countdown live shows conducted by Hamasaki. → included on (Songs don't appear, they are included)
 * It features interludes of a young boy in an angel costume. → An interlude is a short piece of music to bridge one song to another. I think mean intercut
 * Lead should be two paragraphs. Article isn't long enough for 3.
 * These issues are from the lead alone. Looking down, here are obvious errors:
 * Why does a Reception section come before the release section? A song needs to be released before anyone can listen to it to review it.
 * An alternative cover was shot for the single release but was re-issued → And? What is this meant to convey?
 * There is next to no relevant commentary on the re-release cover, so it should be removed from the info box.
 * the 8 cm format → Why is there a gap?
 * Currently, the music video is not officially released on YouTube, → This is useless info. Music videos do not have to go on YouTube. If it didn't happen, then don't write about it.
 * Credits and personnel section and Track listing section have a lot of white space. Both sections should be two columns.
 * Charts, peaks and positions → Really? Charts and certifications is fine
 * Both tables need to conform to WP:ACCESS. Three separate tables for peaks with the shaded column, and same for Certifications#
 * Certifications box should be updated to the new one like on "You Don't Know What to Do"
 * Reference wise:
 * The Village Voice should be in italics
 * HMV should not be in italics
 * HMV appears several times but worded differently (HMV; Hmv.co.jp)
 * Oricon should not be italics
 * Capitals should not be use in the reference titles
 * Overlinking of Count Down TV. Only link the first time.
 * The source for the genres redirects. So the genres are technically not sourced.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
 * Summary


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

I'm sorry but this article is a bit of a mess. I can't pass it in this condition. — Calvin999 07:53, 18 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Outcome