Talk:When We Were Young (Adele song)/GA1

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:37, 16 September 2022 (UTC)

I will start on this today! --K. Peake 09:37, 16 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Thank you for taking this! Very excited for this one.--NØ 11:11, 16 September 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Dean Street Studios → Dean Street in the infobox per the usage of studios in the parameter of the same name
 * WP:OVERLINK of Adele under songwriters
 * Add a comma after third studio album
 * "Adele and Tobias Jesso Jr. wrote it," → "Adele and Tobias Jesso Jr. wrote the song,"
 * Mention how the song was written as the third sentence of the lead since this is notable here
 * The release date is 22 January 2016 not 20 January
 * Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad
 * ""When We Were Young" has piano instrumentation" → "it has piano instrumentation"
 * "Inspired by the imagery" → "Inspired by the vision" or something similar since imagery is not appropriate here
 * Re-word the sentence to mention the song reached the top 10 in 11 countries, including two or three notable ones
 * Add a sentence afterwards mentioning notable certifications
 * "The Ellen DeGeneres Show, and" → "The Ellen DeGeneres Show and"

Background and release

 * Img looks good!
 * "who had produced many songs" → "a producer of many songs"
 * Add the release year of 21
 * Remove overly obvious wikilink on Los Angeles
 * She actually did work with Tobias Jesso Jr. so is writing expressed interest really the appropriate description?
 * "and they spent almost three days" → "and they spent about three days" per the source
 * Only "When We Were Young" is sourced as being created
 * The house location is only sourced as in Los Angeles, not Brentwood
 * "melodies and lyrics."" → "melodies and lyrics"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * Pipe ballads to Sentimental ballad
 * "and started a" → "and started creating a"
 * "He thought it had" → "He thought the song had"
 * Italicise The Fader
 * "he pushed her beyond" → "he pushed Adele beyond"
 * "cry to it."" → "cry to it"." per the source
 * Italicise 60 Minutes
 * "wondering what would be" → "questioning what would be"
 * Pipe digital download to Music download
 * "in some countries" → "in various countries" also, only one country is sourced
 * "Its official artwork features" → "The official artwork features"
 * "of her younger self."" → "of her younger self"."
 * "called it "adorable,"" → "called it "adorable","

Composition and lyrical interpretation

 * "sample of "When We Were Young"'s" → "sample of the song's" on the audio sample text
 * "reminisces past memories" → "reminisces about past memories"
 * "engineered the song, and plays" → "engineered the song and plays" per British English
 * "synthesizer, and percussion." → "synthesizer and percussion." with the wikilink
 * "plays the piano, and" → "plays the piano and"
 * "It incorporates bass, drums, and guitar in its instrumentation, was" → "The song incorporates bass, drums and guitar in its instrumentation, was"
 * "in London, and mixed at" → "in London and mixed at" with the pipe
 * ""When We Were Young" is a" → "Musically, "When We Were Young" is a"
 * Italicise i-D
 * "considered it "a 70s styled shimmery disco ballad."" → "considered the song "a 70s styled shimmery disco ballad"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * ""somber piano chords," which" → ""somber piano chords", which"
 * "show off her staggering, empathic voice."" → "show off [Adele's] staggering, empathic voice"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * "come-to-Jesus money note."" → "come-to-Jesus money note"."
 * "Adele described it as" → "Adele described the song as"
 * "to the work of Elton John, and" → "to the work of Elton John and"
 * Not done as this makes it sound like "The Way We Were" was a duet between John and Streisand.


 * Rest of the section soon!
 * Done up to here! I've kept all the oxford commas. Unless you absolutely insist, I think combing through the article and removing them will be an unnecessary and tedious task. Regards.--NØ 15:48, 16 September 2022 (UTC)
 * It looks good so far; I did some minor copy editing for you though.


 * "The song "finds her" → "The song "finds [Adele]"
 * "it's even over."" → "it's even over"."
 * "in real time," singing:" → "in real time", singing:"
 * "she cries about" → "Adele cries about"
 * Italicise The Atlantic
 * "who 'everybody loves.'"" → "who 'everybody loves'"."
 * "In an interview with SiriusXM," → "In an interview with Sirius XM," with the wikilink
 * "In a New York Times song by song analysis," → "In a song by song analysis by The New York Times," with the wikilink
 * "off the album 25,[29] and later revealed that her" → "off 25,[29] and later revealed her"
 * The lyric is not mentioned by the source

Critical reception

 * Retitle to Reception per the rankings at the end
 * "received acclaim from music critics." → "was met with acclaim from music critics."
 * AllMusic should not be italicised
 * "with its nostalgic theme." → "with the nostalgic theme."
 * Pipe Consequence of Sound to Consequence (publication)
 * "selected it as" → "selected the song as"
 * "positive about her writing skills," → "positive about Adele's writing skills,"
 * Pipe Inquirer to Philippine Daily Inquirer
 * "remarked that "a single" → "remarked, "A single"
 * Pipe The Huffington Post to HuffPost
 * "singers alive today"." → "singers alive today."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
 * "midlife crisis—that won't" → "midlife crisis. That won't" per the source's usage of sentences
 * Too much reviewer introductions using of here; try to vary with introductions like from instead at points
 * "praised her "incredible," → "praised Adele's "incredible,"
 * "sultriness on the verses."" → "sultriness on the verses"."
 * "blossom of Adele's voice."" → "blossom of Adele's voice"."
 * "it a "mature [...] torchy ballad,"" → "the song a "mature [...] torchy ballad","
 * "perform in her sleep."" → "perform in her sleep"."
 * "of PopMatters was praiseful, naming it" → "of PopMatters was praiseful, naming the song"
 * "25 is worth" → "25 is worth"
 * Move the Time part to the start of the next para since that belongs with rankings
 * Remove the several music critics part so the above can join this para
 * I moved it to being the second sentence as I think that works as well.


 * "as her fifth-best," → "as Adele's fifth-best,"
 * "elaborated: "she spins" → "elaborated that "she spins"
 * Wikilink The Guardian

Commercial performance

 * Change to double platinum and mention that the certification was in the United Kingdom
 * The official title of the award here is "2× Platinum", not double platinum.


 * "It reached number 14" → "The song reached number 14"
 * Should platinum really be capitalised?
 * Yup, my explanation from the "Happier Than Ever" GAN applies here as well I suppose.


 * "and earned a 5× Platinum" → "and earned a quintuple platinum" mentioning that this was in Canada
 * Mention the charts the Australia and New Zealand positions were on as well as that the certifications were in the countries
 * "and Gold in Belgium,[70] Mexico." → "and Gold in Belgium and Mexico." moving [70] to the end of the sentence, also should gold really be capitalised?

Live performances

 * The Genting Arena performance is not mentioned in prose, so either write this out or use a different img
 * "on 24 February 2016." → "on 24 February."
 * Mention that the Glastonbury performance was part of the encore
 * The tour name Adele Live 2016 is not sourced

Covers

 * Retitle to Cover versions
 * "her powerful vocals."" → "her powerful vocals"." per MOS:QUOTE

Credits and personnel

 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel
 * Pipe backing vocals to Backing vocalist
 * Pipe percussion to Percussion instrument

Weekly charts

 * See MOS:TABLECAPTION for the second table

Year-end charts

 * Pipe Plötutíóindi to Music of Iceland

Certifications

 * Good

Release history

 * None of these columns should be sortable

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; this took just as long as I thought! --K. Peake 10:48, 17 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Everything should be addressed now, K. Peake. Thanks a lot for the review and apologies for some of those source-text integrity issues in the Background section, I should've gone over that once before the nomination. Hope you have a great week!--NØ 12:15, 17 September 2022 (UTC)
 * All good, apart from why is Andy Black still mentioned in ref 83 when that source says nothing about him? --K. Peake 07:12, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * Fixed now!--NØ 07:18, 18 September 2022 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, nice job on cleaning up this somewhat messy article! --K. Peake 08:13, 18 September 2022 (UTC)