Talk:White-breasted nuthatch/GA1

GA Review
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 * Lead
 * "Adults and young may be killed by hawks, owls and snakes, and forest clearance may lead to local habitat loss, but this is a common species with no major conservation concerns over most of its range." I would split this sentence after snakes.


 * Description
 * "The wing coverts and flight feathers are blackish with paler fringes," blackish sounds a bit vague to me.
 * ✅ - it's what the book says, but changed to very dark gray
 * Okay. If you want to revert it to blackish, since that's the source, then fire away. If you can find any other source might perhaps clarify what colour, it might also be a good idea. Peanut4 (talk) 14:16, 10 August 2008 (UTC)


 * "The face and the underparts are white, and the white of the face extends around the eye." I might suggest re-writing this to "with the white extending around the eyes." or " ..., which extends ..." However, I'm not sure why you need the second clause. Isn't the eye part of the face? I might be missing something here.
 * ✅ removed clause - it's actually a key difference from other NAm nuthatches, but I say that later anyway
 * Yeah, I noticed this later on. I think your change is a good one. It doesn't need saying too much. Peanut4 (talk) 14:16, 10 August 2008 (UTC)


 * Breeding
 * "Once independent, juveniles leave the adult’s territory," I think this should be "adults'" since there are two parents.
 * ✅ Oh, the shame of it - I pride myself on correct possessive apostrophes.
 * Lol. Had a similar one myself. I wanted to cry when I saw someone correct it!! Peanut4 (talk) 14:16, 10 August 2008 (UTC)


 * Survival
 * Is there a wikilink for "diurnal"?


 * "this makes it more difficult for predators to use scent find the nest." I think there's a word missing here.
 * ✅ rephrased for clarity ...this makes it more difficult for a predator to find the nest using its sense of smell.


 * Status
 * Is there a wikilink for "Least Concern"?


 * General
 * All numerals followed by units should do so with a non-breaking space. E.g. 29 birds.
 * ✅ not sure that "bird" is a unit, but done any way

A few things to do, but nothing substantial, so I'll put it on hold. Peanut4 (talk) 21:53, 7 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks for reviewing, jimfbleak (talk) 06:17, 8 August 2008 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

I've left a couple of notes above, which might help further changes. Otherwise a nice article. Not sure it's long enough for FAC, but there's not much other improvements I could suggest if you did want to go to FAC. It's a really nice article, with some very good images. Well done. Peanut4 (talk) 14:16, 10 August 2008 (UTC)