Talk:White-headed capuchin/GA1

GA Review
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Hi, I'll be reviewing this article. Sasata (talk) 01:34, 4 February 2009 (UTC)

GA criteria:
 * Clearly written - prose is generally good, some minor changes to spelling and grammar need fixing, see comments. More wikilinks, and some clarifications are suggested.
 * Factually accurate - well cited, and sources seem reliable.
 * Broad in coverage - coverage good, and meets guidelines outlined in WP:WikiProject Primates.
 * Written from a neutral POV - yes.
 * Stable - yes.
 * Compliant with image use policy. All images have free licenses.

The article is well-written, and appears to be close to GA quality. I'll put the article on hold, and give the nominator a week to address the relatively minor points below. Sasata (talk) 05:32, 6 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments

- italicize Latin name in caption of distribution map

- include the genus abbreviation "C." in front of all synonyms (e.g. C. albulus) as is the usual convention for scientific names

Lead
"...the White-headed Capuchin is important to rainforest ecology by for their role..."

"...has been trained to assist for paraplegic persons."

Description

 * the prehensileness of the tail is mentioned twice in subsequent paragraphs.


 * why is the brain weight notable? Is it relatively large or small, or indicative of cognitive capacity?


 * The last two sentences begin with the conjunctions "But" and "And", which although acceptable, is less formal than using "However" and "Also". Your call.

Social structure

 * "Although the males are not necessarily related to each other, they are less competitive with each other than males South American capuchins, and they associate with each other and cooperate to drive away predators and males from outside the group." Doesn't sound right - the second "males" should be "male", and "each other" is used three times in the sentence.


 * "White-headed Capuchin troops occupy home ranges of between 32 and 86 hectares (79 and 210 acres) square metres." is the m2 supposed to be there?


 * the terms groups and troops seem to be used interchangeably, and I'm not sure if they're synonymous or refer to different types of social structures. Please clarify, or use one term consistently.


 * please define what is meant by "conspecific groups"


 * "Lower ranking animals are more likely to groom higher ranking animals than vice versa." "rank" not clearly defined; from what I can gather from the text, the only two "rankings" are dominant and non-dominant. Please clarify.


 * define or wikilink sympatric


 * "This may be because the distribution of food in the areas where Central American Squirrel Monkeys occur and is such that the cost to the squirrel monkeys of associating with the capuchins in lost feeding opportunities would not offset the benefit to the squirrel monkeys in predator detection." This sentence is a mouthful; removing the suggested "and" would make it better, but a rewrite would be best. Also, in this sentence, "lost feeding opportunities" suggests they are eating the same food, while the next sentence seems to contradict this.

Diet

 * "Fruit can make up between 50% and 67% of the capuchin's diet" - Cit this, or combine with next sentence if the source is the same.


 * why wikilink only caterpillars but not the several other insects in its diet? Same for mollusks in the next sentence.


 * "The capuchins' intelligence is thought to be a result of their feeding habits" this makes it sound like they get their intelligence by good eating habits, which is not the meaning that I think was intended.

Tool use

 * "Other species of capuchin monkey are also trained..." monkeys


 * "television series Friends" missing period


 * "It was also traditionally used as organ grinder monkeys." It->they

Conservation status

 * "...deforestation may also mpact its main predator..." impact


 * "...The White-headed Capuchin is important to its ecosystems for a number of reasons," Either give me the reasons or rephrase so I'm not left hanging.

Taxonomy

 * define or wikilink species group


 * redundant wikilinking of locations in the subspecies list (Panama, Nicaragua)

Other

 * The references could use a minor copyedit to remove double periods, and differences in citation styles introduced by citations templates.

Reply
Thank you for your comments, I believe I have addressed them, and significantly improved the article as a result. Rlendog (talk) 00:09, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Yes, the article looks great now. I made a few minor spelling fixes. One small thing, did you mean "antagonism" where you wrote "agonism"? Wasn't sure, so didn't change it myself. Sasata (talk) 00:30, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the compliment and the additional fixes. I did mean agonism, which came right from the source.  I think it is correct.  "Antagonism" would imply a level of hostility that doesn't seem to be present in, say, supplanting a fellow monkey from a feeding spot, especially if a subordinate is supplanting a more dominant monkey or if the two monkeys may align against non-troop monkeys (in true antagonsim) moments later.   But "agonism" implies "contest", which seems like a more accurate description here. Rlendog (talk) 01:57, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * I'm happy to promote this excellent article to GA-status. Thanks for your contribution to Wikipedia!. Sasata (talk) 08:55, 9 February 2009 (UTC)