Talk:Whitney North Seymour Jr./GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kingsif (talk · contribs) 03:42, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

I'll review this, comments should be added soon! Kingsif (talk) 03:42, 29 September 2019 (UTC)

Style

 * Lead good length for article
 * First paragraph of lead could be split (probably best just before "As U.S. Attorney...")
 * First two sections could be merged into one titled 'Early life and military career' or even just 'Early life'
 * Well-written throughout
 * The later life subsection is appropriate in career, but since it's so short, it may fit better if included in a short intro paragraph of the whole Career section (above early career subsection header) - such an intro, with other chronological details, would in general be beneficial since the overall section is fairly extensive and well-divided.
 * Needs attention

Coverage

 * Lead gives good overview
 * Sufficient info on early life
 * Career solidly comprehensive; good enough detail for GA, though I feel like more exists
 * Fair coverage of civic leadership; perhaps if quotes about his influence exist they could be added here
 * Very nice expansion on items in the Writings section
 * Personal life satisfactory
 * Pass - some ideas, though

Illustration

 * Are there no images of him, a DA and State senator?
 * Good use of table at the bottom
 * Needs attention

Neutrality

 * Good language throughout
 * Pass

Verifiability

 * All sources look good
 * Everything cited
 * Pass

Stability

 * Solid edit history
 * Pass

Copyright

 * Check looks good, mostly proper nouns flagged
 * No images
 * Pass

Overall

 * on hold - a few comments to be looked at. Kudos for the structuring yesterday - I think it makes the article better. Kingsif (talk) 21:29, 29 September 2019 (UTC)


 * : Many thanks, very helpful. I've gone through and made some additional edits. I added some content to the "later life" section so I think the standalone section looks OK now. I tried to find a copyright-free image to add, but I haven't had any luck finding one. Neutralitytalk 02:56, 30 September 2019 (UTC)
 * looks good. Symbol support vote.svg Kingsif (talk) 03:24, 30 September 2019 (UTC)