Talk:Whitney Russell/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 11:18, 1 June 2016 (UTC)

Happy to take on this. I will take a few days to post all my comments. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 11:18, 1 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much! Take all the time you need. Aoba47 (talk) 15:49, 1 June 2016 (UTC)

No dablinks, no copyvio detected. Fairly well-written, only a few comments:


 * Background
 *  Passions followed romantic and supernatural adventures in the fictional, coastal, New England town of Harmony A paraphrase of this would make a good start for this article, and later you will not have to say what "Harmony" means.
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * You may like to day "25" instead of "twenty five" per WP:MOSNUM, just a style unless it looks too "numbery".
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Russell family and Lopez-Fitzgerald (to Lopez-Fitzgerald family)
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Casting and characterization
 * "Twenty-nine" would look better as "29"
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Brook Kerr. There is no problem in repeating links from the lead (though it is not of much use for very short articles).
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Add who Chad Harris-Crane and Tracey Ross were in the program.
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Storylines
 * For some characters you mention who played them, for others you don't.
 * Done. I meant to take these out before so I apologize for this. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * Don't leave paras unsourced. Use some inline citations so that verifiability is ensured. Also note that placing a ref. at the end of a lot of text means all of it is supported by this ref. (ref. 9 may thus be misconstrued) so this situation needs to be fixed.
 * Done. I added citations to episodes where necessary. I can't cite everything as certain sentences cover weeks, months, and sometimes years of the show, but I added the references to specific episodes when necessary. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * with her sister Simone Was she Whitney's only sibling? Mention the others
 * Whitney only has one sibling (Simone). Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * I don't think a link is needed for "crush"
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 *  resulting in Chard being erroneously identified  You mean "Chad"?
 * Done. That is embarrassing. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * she is pregnant with Miles Harris-Crane You should say "with Chad's child (who would later be known as Miles Harris-Crane)"
 * Done. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * becoming known as Whitney Russell Harris-Crane This should be mentioned as an "a.k.a." name in the first line of the lead.
 * For soap opera characters, it is encouraged to use the common name for the character and I was discouraged from using maiden name or married names in the lead. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)


 * You may like to use a few subheadings, as in Ruth Archer.
 * Done. I was advised against subheadings in a previous review for a different soap opera character, but I prefer the subheadings too. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)

Rest looks good. Would be happy to promote once the above comments are addressed. Cheers, Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 10:20, 3 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review! You have provided a lot of very helpful advice. I have addressed all your comments; let me know if there is anything else that needs to be changed/improved. Aoba47 (talk) 05:01, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Cool! This can now be promoted. Great job! Sainsf  (talk · contribs) 05:10, 4 June 2016 (UTC)
 * Thank you! You are a big help; I look forward to working with you in the future. Aoba47 (talk) 05:22, 4 June 2016 (UTC)