Talk:Who's That Girl (1987 film)/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer:-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me  I think this article was unfairly failed last time. Editors weren't even given a chance. I don't think its fair for Legs to wait any longer :)-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   08:58, 29 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Ughh, dopnt call me Legs, as it is my wife uses that to tease me for my online name. — Legolas ( talk 2 me ) 09:27, 29 December 2010 (UTC)
 * Lol, gotcha :) Beginning review-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   04:41, 11 January 2011 (UTC)

Lead

 * I think "produced by WB" is better
 * Weird tense issues. Madonna played -> plays, was sent -> is sent
 * hometown Philadelphia -> of
 * wanted -> wants
 * capture the people who framed her, and both of them get caught -> doesn't flow well
 * till -> until
 * was on halt -> halted
 * eight years ago -> prior
 * grossing in total of US $25 million, by playing in front of an audience of 1.5 million. -> Its not "an" audience, its not only one show, its various happening at different times. Also, reword a bit
 * and Foley as a director -> and Foley's direction
 * first week -> opening
 * Done and copy-edited. It was 944 theatres, I re-checked. — Legolas ( talk 2 me ) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)

Plot

 * characteristic look -> ?
 * Made it better. — Legolas ( talk 2 me ) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)
 * helps her find -> help
 * the mountain lion -> don't see how this fits in. I haven't heard anything about it before now. What significance does it hold?
 * It is there in the first para itself. — Legolas ( talk 2 me ) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)
 * There Nikki and Loudon -> there,
 * expresses -> express
 * Honestly, the last paragraph doesn't make much sense. I have not seen the film, and have a pretty good understanding until the last paragraph.
 * Don't even make the mistake of watching the film if you don't wanna suicide. :) — Legolas ( talk 2 me ) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)
 * I don't see what purpose the free-media photo serves except eye-candy. It has no mention whatsoever in the section and really holds no significant importance, therefore failing I believe criteria 3a.
 * It has mention in the filming and production section. A non-free image not necessarily has to be in that particular section, kinda like artwork and posters, even when their rationale and commentary may bein a separate section. And how can free-media images fail #3a? That is for NFCC, not commons. — Legolas ( talk 2 me ) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)

Development

 * Madonna's 1986 studio album True Blue was a critical and commercial success, spawning five top-five singles, and selling over eight million copies worldwide, by the year-end -> don't see why this is necessary to include, but if you prefer it, then leave it, I won't stop you.
 * This line I purposefully inserted, as I believe it presents a stark contrast against Madonna's successful singing career, and how pathetic her film career was. — Legolas ( talk 2 me ) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)
 * as she wanted it to be -> she had hoped

Casting

 * Good

Filming

 * About her acting abilities -> regarding
 * shooting the major scenes involving Madonna were over -> re-write
 * in the set -> on

Release and promotion

 * celebration was planned -> planned makes it sound like it never happened, which it obviously did
 * Musically and technically superior -> how so musically?
 * huge -> I personally don't like the word huge
 * Madonna named the tour as Who's That Girl, when during rehearsals one-day she looked at a gigantic image of herself, projected on a screen on the stage -> I don't get it
 * U.S. -> US - MOS
 * audience -> audience members
 * was the second top female concert -> top selling

Critical response

 * The film received mixed reviews from critics -> you wrote before it was a "critical failure"
 * First quote is a bit long. Should paraphrase or reduce bulk, or blockquote.

Critical reception

 * a total of 944 theaters -> you wrote 1,000 before. Be consistent.
 * once incident -> one
 * Source for Razzys?

Soundtrack

 * uptempo song and a downtempo song -> other wording would be better

Overall

 * There you go Legolas, let me know when its all fixed :)-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   10:24, 11 January 2011 (UTC)


 * Others are done. Just check and revert back. — Legolas ( talk 2 me ) 16:32, 11 January 2011 (UTC)