Talk:Wilhelm Reich/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: EricEnfermero (talk · contribs) 12:09, 8 March 2013 (UTC)

I will be glad to take on this review. I should be able to provide at least some initial feedback by the weekend. Hopefully I can get the process started quickly, as I see that the article has been nominated for some time already. EricEnfermero Howdy! 12:09, 8 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Many thanks, Eric, that's much appreciated. SlimVirgin (talk) 17:25, 8 March 2013 (UTC)

Thank you guys for your hard work on this article. Reich is a controversial figure, and that is reflected in the talk page comments over several years, but all content disputes seem to be dormant if not resolved. Despite this being a long article, I see very few items that need to be addressed.

Lead

 * May want to link University of Vienna and neuropsychiatry (second paragraph)


 * psychoanalytic outpatients' clinic - outpatient (no apostrophe or s) is a bit more common, may be more straightforward


 * What is the source for the six tons in the portion about book burning?


 * First two fixed, and source added for the six tons.

Early life

 * I would avoid saying "by all accounts" unless specifically attributed to a source; might use an example of a source that said he was cold and jealous.


 * I've left this because all the sources I've seen mention it; attributing it to just one would make it sound as though it was just one opinion. And as I suppose all the sources about this ultimately rely on Reich anyway, there probably isn't another opinion out there.

1919-1930

 * Rework the sentence beginning "He arrived in the city with nothing" - might just take out the "where in addition..." portion. I generally prefer shorter sentences, but that's just a personal preference. In this case though, the sentence isn't quite clear.


 * Is there doubt about whether he considered shooting himself? I'm not sure what to make of the "apparently." Best to clarify further.


 * I think we generally prefer hyphens or other punctuation in lieu of slashes, as in reductionist/mechanistic. Some other sources use hyphens or commas between these two words.


 * Fixed the first, removed the second, left the third. It's reductionist, i.e. mechanistic, so a slash is more appropriate than a hyphen. SlimVirgin (talk) 19:52, 14 March 2013 (UTC)

1930-1934

 * In the "Verlag..." section, the government "failed to renew" his visa - denied the renewal of?


 * I may be missing it, but who is Paul Federn?


 * Fixed the visa issue. Paul Federn is described on first reference: "The appointment was made over the objection of Paul Federn (1871–1950), who had been Reich's second analyst in 1922 and who, according to Sharaf, regarded Reich as a psychopath."

1934-1939

 * First sentence under Personal life is a bit awkward. Better might be "According to Sharaf, Reich's personal life was the happiest between 1934 and 1937."


 * Fixed.

1947-1957

 * Under Imprisonment, flying saucer guy and sex box man should probably be in quotes as they aren't common phrases.


 * Done. SlimVirgin (talk) 19:52, 14 March 2013 (UTC)

Most of this stuff is pretty superficial, so it should be straightforward to address. I may make some additional minor copyedits. I look forward to promoting this. Thank you for some hard work on a thorough and extensively sourced article. EricEnfermero Howdy! 15:14, 14 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Thanks, Eric, I'll go through the article and smooth out the issues you raised. SlimVirgin (talk) 16:36, 14 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Thanks for your prompt reply. Any remaining issues fall outside the scope of GA.

Thank you for dedicated work on this article over several years. EricEnfermero Howdy! 22:15, 14 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the review and promotion, Eric. SlimVirgin (talk) 21:06, 15 March 2013 (UTC)