Talk:Will Rogers (American football)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 14:40, 16 May 2023 (UTC)

I'll take this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk)  @ 14:40, 16 May 2023 (UTC)

General

 * MOS:DASH, go through and update all the hyphens to en dashes.
 * Done

Lead

 * Expand lead to include info about high school career.
 * Done
 * MOS:CITELEAD, no need for the inline citation in the lead.
 * Done

Early life and high school career

 * Rogers was born on August 19, 2001 in Louisville, Mississippi., comma after "2001"
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 * I would spell out the whole link Brandon, Mississippi, since "Brandon" is typically a first name.
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 * A strong athlete, he played a variety of sports growing up, including baseball and soccer but was the most passionate about football, where in elementary school he ran drills with his fathers high school players., I would split into two sentences. ...and soccer. However, he was the most...
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 * fathers high school players., "fathers" should be "father's"
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 * MOS:ACRO1STUSE, spell out NFL in it's first use
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 * under his father who served as the teams offensive coordinator, "teams" should be "team's"
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College career

 * for the seasons first game., "seasons" should be "season's"
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 * ...replacing a struggling Costello. Rogers struggled in his debut, throwing two interceptions., repetitive use of "struggle" sounds weird
 * Changed word
 * ...have a historic performance on the road against Auburn., the hidden linking of "road" isn't necessary
 * Removed
 * Two weeks later he had his highest passer rating of the season, posting a 194.0 rating in a blowout win over East Tennessee State., the duplication of "rating" sounds weird, maybe try to rewrite a bit?
 * Rewrote sentence
 * coach Mike Leach unexpectedly passed away after suffering a heart attack, delete "unexpectedly" and replace "passed away" with "died" MOS:EUPHEMISM
 * Done

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