Talk:William (The X-Files)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 04:34, 17 July 2012 (UTC)

General

 * No dab links . Great work!
 * No dead links . Great work!

Infobox

 * As per "Squeeze" article, it should have Season 9 linked, and the List of The X-Files episodes removed.
 * ✅ (by reviewer)-- TBrandley 03:14, 18 July 2012 (UTC)

Lede

 * An episode can really "premiered" how about "originally aired". Thanks!
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Unlink United States as the other countries not linked
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * In the lede, Fox network is linked, but in the "Reception" section, only Fox is linked. Please choose only one.
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "The story for the episode was developed by former series star David Duchovny, series creator Chris Carter, and executive producer Frank Spotnitz; the teleplay was written by Carter. The episode was directed by Duchovny." A little messy. How about: The teleplay of the episode was written by Chris Carter, from a story by former series star David Duchovny, series creator Carter, and executive producer Frank Spotnitz
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Could "The episode was directed by Duchovny. "William" be merge with the previous sentence
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * I know this might change everything else, but how about "The season centers on FBI special agents John Doggett (Robert Patrick), Monica Reyes (Annabeth Gish), and Dana Scully (Gillian Anderson)", rather than series. Because I see other articles that say it centers on Mulder and Scully
 * ✅ Good idea. I rephrased it.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "Chris Owens was asked to return to the series for the episode. Owens' character had previously been killed off in the sixth season episode "One Son". How about: "Chris Owens was asked to return to the series for the episode, whose character had previously been killed off in the sixth season episode "One Son"
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)

Plot

 * older social worker should have the actor name besides in brackets
 * I just removed this section as it isn't really necessary.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Mrs. Van De Kamp should have the actor name beside it in brackets as I see actor in the infobox
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Add actor name for Baby Williams
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "an unknown man (Chris Owens watches them." Your missing brackets after Owens
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "X-Filess" To many "s"' should be "X-Files"
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "After being knocked down, pursues his assailant. Doggett draws his gun and commands him to stop. The man turns and slowly steps back towards Doggett with his hands up. Doggett’s expression suggests horror at the man’s face." Could some sentences be merge
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Per MOS:PUNCT, "Consistent use of the straight (or typewriter) apostrophe ( ' ) is recommended, as opposed to the curly (or typographic) apostrophe ( ’ )." That being said, I see that Doggett’s and man’s use that when they should use '
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "the new one being hidden within the government and the people involved being alien". Awkward, what does that mean?
 * I tried to rephrase it, but the grammar is sound. The new one is in the government and the people in the conspiracy are aliens.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)

Production

 * Unlink executive producer, as it is a common term per WP:OVERLINK
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "Owens' character had previously been killed off in the sixth season episode "One Son"." citation/reference needed
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Could you add "It was Carter's X writing credit in the series", etc. Thanks!
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)

Broadcast and reception

 * An episode can really "first premiered" how about "originally aired". Thanks!
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * A little picky, but above it uses "received", but below it uses "earned". Please only choose one.
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "The episode was viewed by 9.3 viewers" what above it says "viewed by 6.1 million households". Very confused. Is that for the UK, what?
 * ✅ Moved things around to clarify.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "aired". Episodes air all the time, how about "originally broadcast, originally aired, first aired in the United Kingdom, etc."
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Above it says television critics, here it is only "critics". Choose one please.
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "Other reviews were not as glowing". Glowing shouldn't be used. IMO it does sound like an ad. How about: Other reviews were negative, etc.
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * Chris Owens should have an apostrophe.
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)
 * "He did however, praised Duchovny's directing" should be "praise", not "praised"
 * ✅-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)  16:59, 17 July 2012 (UTC)