Talk:William Eustis/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 22:20, 5 March 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this review. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. As always, thanks for your work on this one. -- Khazar2 (talk) 22:20, 5 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for reviewing! I believe I've addressed your issues.  Magic ♪piano 14:20, 6 March 2013 (UTC)

Initial comments
Did I say the next 1-3 days? I meant next 10-20 minutes. Only two quibbles I see. As previously, I made minor copyedits as I went; please double-check and feel free to revert.


 * "In September 1780 he played a minor role in the flight of traitor Benedict Arnold" -- this sentence confused me at first, in that I thought Eustis might have been some sort of conspirator. Perhaps it would be better to just say, "In September 1780, following the flight of traitor Benedict Arnold, Eustis treated ..." Clarified  Magic ♪piano 14:20, 6 March 2013 (UTC)
 * "Massachusetts General Court " -- it would be helpful to clarify that this is a legislative body rather than a judicial one. Perhaps you could just say "elected to the Massachusetts state legislature"? Clarified  Magic ♪piano 14:20, 6 March 2013 (UTC)