Talk:William Feiner/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 18:50, 28 July 2019 (UTC)

That's it, mainly trivial. All the GA criteria principally covered, so just these trivia to cover. The Rambling Man (REJOICE!) 19:56, 28 July 2019 (UTC)
 * If you wish to link English language, then link the whole "English language" rather than just "English".
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  00:28, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * "December 27, 1792 in the city " comma after 1792, and is "the city of" really needed?
 * Done. I include "city of" so as to distinguish it from the province the city is in.  Ergo Sum  00:29, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * "July 12, 1808 in White Russia[4] (i.e. Belarus),[5] " comma after 1808, and I would dare suggest that (i.e. Belarus) really should be footnote.
 * Added comma.  Ergo Sum  00:41, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * " the Holy Roman Empire[7] and Galicia." awkward ref placement, I think the readers can wait to the end of the sentence (two more words) for [7]. And where is "Galicia" referenced?
 * Done. And, it's in the Burson & Wright ref.  Ergo Sum  00:30, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * If it was me, I wouldn't link "Polish" or "German", those are very common geographical terms.
 * Ordinarily, I would agree with you. Here, though, they are the focus of the conversation, rather than just mentioned in passing, so I think it makes sense to link them.  Ergo Sum  00:31, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * "William Feiner.[3] From 1823 to 1826, Feiner was" No need to repeat Feiner so quickly, just use "he" here.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  00:32, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * Now then, you pipe both "Germans" and "German language" to "German". This is potentially confusing (as a rule of thumb, I never use the same piped text for different links)...
 * Clarified.  Ergo Sum  00:33, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * Definitely, 100% no need to link Europe.
 * Unlinked.  Ergo Sum  00:34, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * Nor "librarian".
 * Unlinked.  Ergo Sum  00:35, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * Nor New York, but I would advise stating "New York City" rather than leave the potential vagaries of the state of NY.
 * Clarified.  Ergo Sum  00:35, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * "permitted to resign the office and eagerly set sail " I smiled here because it could be read that he was permitted to eagerly set sail.
 * I've rephrased to avoid the confusion.  Ergo Sum  00:40, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * "May 4, 1826[4] by" comma after 1826.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  00:40, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * Ref 14: p. 201–202 should be pp.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  00:41, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * I believe I've addressed all your comments. Thank you for them.  Ergo Sum  01:05, 1 August 2019 (UTC)
 * All looks fine to me, so I've passed this nomination. Good work. The Rambling Man (REJOICE!) 07:20, 1 August 2019 (UTC)