Talk:William Hayden English/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 00:40, 16 October 2013 (UTC)

Hey Coemgenus, I'll be glad to take this one. Comments to follow hopefully tonight; if not, in the next 1-4 days. Thanks in advance for your work on it! -- Khazar2 (talk) 00:40, 16 October 2013 (UTC)


 * Thanks, I look forward to your comments. --Coemgenus (talk) 01:01, 16 October 2013 (UTC)

Okay, I've made a few tweaks as I went; feel free to revert any you disagree with. On the whole, though, this looks terrific. It's well-written, excellently sourced, and a check against some Google sources shows that it's fairly complete in its coverage. I came close to quick-passing this, but there's just a few points I wanted to consult with you on:


 * "Hancock and English lost the election by only 39,213 popular votes. The electoral count, however, had a much larger spread: Garfield-Arthur 214 and Hancock-English 155." -- as statistics, these need inline citation
 * Done.
 * "was the noted socialist and NAACP co-founder William English Walling." -- "noted" seems like slight peacocking here per WP:PEA; I think the word could simply be cut. It might also be worth spelling out the full acronym of the NAACP for non-US readers.
 * Good points. Done.
 * No citations appear to point to the Carleton citation--should it be removed from the list of references?
 * Done.
 * Is it worth mentioning that he was a Smithsonian regent?, Your call.
 * Certainly noteworthy, but I'm not sure where I'd put it that wouldn't interrupt the flow of the prose. I'll have another look tonight. In the meantime, I'm open to suggestions. --Coemgenus (talk) 16:25, 16 October 2013 (UTC)

Let me know your thoughts, and thanks for this great contribution. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:06, 16 October 2013 (UTC)
 * Okay, that resolves the above. The Smithsonian regency isn't enough of a "main aspect" to hold up a GA pass, but may be worth including if this goes to FA. -- Khazar2 (talk) 16:41, 16 October 2013 (UTC)