Talk:William Montagu, 1st Earl of Salisbury/GA1

GA Review
The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.'' review started.--Auntieruth55 (talk) 18:01, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

This is a thorough article. Before I act on the good Article Assessment, I suggest that you pay attention to a few of your "awkward" moments. For example:


 * end comma for phrases in overview, first sentence.
 * needs a separate "Sources Cited section".
 * Were Isabella and Mortimer regents for the king? That sentence is awkward.
 * section on coup confusing. Who met up with the king?  Mortimer or Montagu?  Who was brawling?
 * "disguised as merchants not to be recognised" ... so as not to be recognized?
 * "It was after this event that his lordship over the Isle of Man was recognised..." wordiness!! ... after this event his lordship *over the Isle of Man was recognised...."
 * Redlinks
 * comital, explain this term, either parenthetically, or with a short phrase. also possible wikilink.
 * Robert Ufford, Earl of Suffolk who was captured with him ... Robert Ufford, Earl of Suffolk, who was captured with him

I suggest that you ask one of the guild of copy editors to give you some assistance in this. Basically, style and punctuation are between you and the Good article. Drop a line on my user discussion page when you've got it in order -- these are minor details, but they will make a difference in the clarity of your prose. thanks for the hard work! --Auntieruth55 (talk) 18:21, 30 May 2009 (UTC)