Talk:William Penny Brookes

Poorly written
This article needs a lot of work. Especially with sentences like this: "Later you will read about Dr. Brookes bringing in the railway to Much Wenlock to help the economic prosperity of the town"

Urrrrgh! It's verbosity is painful. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 86.171.19.146 (talk) 14:34, 15 April 2010 (UTC)


 * As the person who first started the article in 2008, I tend to agree with you. Obviously, it has been through many other editors' hands since then, and I haven't kept up with all the changes.  The particular example you give is one of a raft of changes introduced by an unregistered editor in February 2009, in this edit, which (from the style) may well be a copyright violation anyway.  When I have more time I'll check through the article and copy edit it - otherwise, feel free to do it yourself (keeping all the bits that I wrote, obviously... ;-) )  Ghmyrtle (talk) 14:48, 15 April 2010 (UTC)

Paragraph 'retired'
''Regarding his own education, Brookes had been given the opportunity to experience some of the best teaching, hence his travel to Padua in Italy, one of the finest places in the world at that time to learn about herbal medicine and botany as the city's university is located in the grounds of the mediaeval herb gardens. Also, he attended the "walking the wards" teaching at the hospitals in Paris to observe innovative new methods in medicine.''

I have decided to take this unencylopaedic paragraph, which appears later in the 'Life' setion, out of the page as it highlights his education in a way that duplicates in more detail what has been already written of his overseas education in the opening paragraph of the 'Life' section. Other users could merge detail from this into the remaining paragraph. It is not usual to comment in biographies on the quality of a subject's education unless it had a proven bearing on what they did later, or there is a controversy about the veracity of what has been publicly claimed.Cloptonson (talk) 19:13, 23 May 2021 (UTC)