Talk:William R. Farrand/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 03:40, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

Criteria
1. Prose ✅

2. Verifiability ✅

3. Depth of Coverage ✅

4. Neutral ✅

5. Stable ✅

6. Illustrations ✅

7. Miscellaneous ✅

Comments
1.
 * "The company was split up in 1897 by the two main partners, Edwin S. Votey and himself." - Is there a way to simplify the phrasing here?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:29, 16 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "He then became the president of the Farrand Organ Company and specialized in manufacturing reed organs" - I think which would be a better word choice than and
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 16 May 2020 (UTC)


 * Link reed organ
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 16 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "In 1893 the Mayor of Detroit" - Comma after 1893
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 16 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "In 1893 the Mayor of Detroit appointed him a member of the public lighting commission and was promoted president in 1897." - A literal interpretation of the clause order would suggest that the Major was promoted to president, can this be rephrased to make it clear the subject is Farrand?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:08, 16 May 2020 (UTC)


 * Link Presbyterian
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 16 May 2020 (UTC)


 * "Republican party" - capitalize party and link
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:03, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

2.
 * Sources in alphabetical order
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:50, 16 May 2020 (UTC)


 * Add ISBN/OCLC where possible, the Junchen book at least has an ISBN.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:50, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

3.
 * "In 1893 the Mayor of Detroit appointed him a member of the public lighting commission and was promoted president in 1897." - Is the mayor's name known?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:12, 16 May 2020 (UTC)


 * Is there information with which his role in the companies can be expanded? He's most notable for that, and it only gets a few paragraphs
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:34, 16 May 2020 (UTC)

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 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take a look at it now. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 15:34, 16 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Still some ref OCLC stuff that can be added. With some of these older books, the OCLCs are important to identify the exact work.  The OCLC for Moore is 	657081089, .  Hog Farm (talk) 17:11, 16 May 2020 (UTC)
 * All OCLCs have been filled in. Thanks for the hint on how to find those on WorldCat. I didn't know.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:19, 16 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Passing. In my opinion, it meets the GA requirement for coverage (although the previous reviewer seems to disagree).  For A-Class or Featured Article, this would need some more information about his business activities, but in my opinion, this meets the GA standards. Hog Farm (talk) 21:41, 16 May 2020 (UTC)