Talk:William Trench, 5th Earl of Clancarty/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:28, 9 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments That's all I have for now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 12:27, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Usually don't need references in the lead, per WP:LEADCITE.
 * "nobleman from the Dutch nobility," nobleman from nobility? Repetitive.
 * Lead feels like it could be expanded to a couple more sentences.
 * "He was born..." normally biographies re-iterate the name of the subject in the opening sentence of the first para of the main body of the article.
 * "at Eton College. He served" -> "at Eton College before serving"
 * Did I miss the link to Earl of Clancarty in the prose?
 * In the infobox, what is meant by Family and The Peerage, both linking to The Peerage?
 * " Galway on the" comma after Galway.
 * "on the market" perhaps "up for sale"?
 * "It followed the Wyndham Land (Purchase) Act 1903" what does that mean?
 * "and later died " no need for "later".
 * Background seems to be in the wrong place for me.
 * "emigrated to Ireland from England in 1631." unref.
 * Only one of the children appears to be inline referenced?
 * "The story of the early relationship..." unref.
 * I guess I'll close this in the next couple of days if I don't see any progress. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 07:29, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Okeydokes, hopefully someone will be able to use the comments to improve the article at some point. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 15:31, 21 September 2021 (UTC)