Talk:William Ufford, 2nd Earl of Suffolk/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Renata (talk) 10:51, 7 July 2010 (UTC)

Generally, the article seems ok. But I do have a couple rather minor nitpicks and clarification requests. Overall, good job. Renata (talk) 10:51, 7 July 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Please use William, Suffolk, and Ufford consistently. Pick one name and stick to it.
 * 2) "On 4 November 1369, William's father died and William was invested with the earldom of Suffolk soon after." -> when did his brothers die? who were they?
 * 3) "William and Thomas Beauchamp were going overseas" -> change to "William de Ufford and Thomas Beauchamp" as it seems you are talking about two Beauchamp brothers.
 * 4) "he participated in the rather unsuccessful campaigns of 1370" -> where? which war?
 * 5) "shared some of the same retainers.[8][clarification needed]" -> resolve the tag
 * 6) "At the Good Parliament in 1367 Suffolk" -> I believe the date is incorrect
 * 7) "discuss the parliament's grievances concerning Gaunt" -> a couple of words what those grievances were
 * 8) Move info about his 2 marriages to earlier sections - it does not really belong to "death" section
 * 9) "Net worth c. £2–3,000 p.a." -> ref needed


 * Pardon my tardiness, and thanks for your patience. This is what I've done to address your issues:
 * This is actually consistent: I use William up until his succession in 1369 (to avoid confusion with his father) and Suffolk thereafter.
 * I don't think much biographical information survives on his brothers, but I added the name of the oldest one.
 * Done
 * Expanded
 * I added a short explanation, I hope this is enough.
 * Silly mistake, good catch!
 * Done
 * Ok, I've moved the marriages up but maintained some information about the dispersal of the estates at the bottom, and renamed the section "Death and dispersal of estates".
 * Done
 * Hope this helps, let me know if there is anything else. Lampman (talk) 03:12, 15 July 2010 (UTC)
 * All good. I like what you did to marriages. They explain about his life, don't they? Thanks! Renata (talk) 03:34, 15 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks! I actually did an extensive rewrite based on your suggestions, and I think it's a better article now. Lampman (talk) 10:30, 15 July 2010 (UTC)