Talk:William Y. Slack/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Djmaschek (talk · contribs) 04:27, 18 March 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * Review 1 Please fix or argue your case for not fixing. Djmaschek (talk) 05:08, 19 March 2023 (UTC)
 * Infobox: Battles/Wars is missing his Mexican-American War service.
 * Done
 * Introduction, paragraph 1, sentence 2: "as a child an entered" (an > and).
 * Corrected
 * Early life and career, paragraph 1, last sentence: "Slack had also married" ("had also" are not needed in this sentence).
 * Done
 * Early life and career, paragraph 2, last sentence: "blocked a retreat route" (blocked the enemy's retreat route).
 * Done
 * Civil War service is really lo-o-o-ong. Suggest adding subheaders (Carthage, Wilson's Creek & Pea Ridge?).
 * Have split this up
 * I love the State Guard map. It might be helpful to move the map up to paragraph 2 where the article first mentions the 4th Division, MSG.
 * Done
 * Civil War service, paragraph 2: "but left the area in June" (What area? Suggest: northwest Missouri or Chillicothe area).
 * Clarified
 * Civil War service, paragraph 2: "the state capital" (Be specific. Suggest: Jefferson City, the state capital).
 * Done
 * Civil War service, paragraph 4: "time to reorganized" (reorganize).
 * Corrected
 * Civil War service, paragraph 4, last sentence: "Overall, the Federal lines repulsed three Confederate assaults, but withdrew from the field." (This sounds wrong. You're summing up a whole battle in one sentence. Replace "Overall" with Ultimately or At day's end? Replace "but withdrew" with before withdrawing? See what you can do with this.).
 * Have fleshed out some context on Wilson's Creek a little more
 * Civil War service, paragraph 5, sentence 1: (Needs a period at the end.)
 * Fixed
 * Civil War service, paragraph 5, last sentence: "The assigned" (Suggest: His assignment to command).
 * Tweaked the phrasing
 * Civil War service, paragraph 7: "that new of Slack's death" (news).
 * Oops, corrected
 * Civil War service, paragraph 8: "had a tendence to" (tendency).
 * Fixed
 * Civil War service, paragraph 8: "Slack's men "devotedly..." (Slack's men were)
 * Done
 * More illustrations (e.g. Wilson's Creek, Pea Ridge, map of Missouri with locations) would really look nice, but are not required.
 * I've an image of the cemetery he is buried in. I'm not over-awed by the accuracy of the historical prints of Wilson's Creek and Pea Ridge.  There's some decent stuff for Lexington/Hemp Bales, but unfortunately Slack missed that one.
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * a. (major aspects):
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 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
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 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
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Initial review
I want to do this one because I'm on a Civil War kick. Please note that I'm going to be out-of-pocket for a few days and may not get back to this until the middle of next week. Djmaschek (talk) 04:27, 18 March 2023 (UTC)
 * - I've addressed all of these; sorry for the delay in getting to this. Hog Farm Talk 01:08, 24 March 2023 (UTC)
 * GA class. I made one correction in the Early life section that I missed earlier. Djmaschek (talk) 04:22, 24 March 2023 (UTC)